Noga`s Draft #1

Cinderella the Sequel
By: Noga Goldman

This is a one of a kind narrative that some people may know. It’s called “Cinderella” .Every thing from Cinderella dreaming of going to the ball to getting married to the prince has all happened in the past. Now let me tell you what happened one year after Cinderella and the prince got married.

It all started when Cinderella had her first baby. The baby’s name was Amanda. Amanda was a sweet, cuddly baby that had brown hair, blue eyes and a lot freckles on her cheeks. When Amanda was born Cinderella’s fairy god mother came to visit her and Cinderella asked the Fairy god mother to cast a glorious spell on Amanda. The Fairy god mother cast this spell “Abra-kadabra bibity bop you will be as beautiful as a swan and as precious as a bunny” but as she said that while waving her golden wand Amanda turned into a cute fluffy bunny!

While the prince got Amanda a carrot from the kitchen, Cinderella started to get frustrated .Cinderella’s face got red, her arms drooping and her voice sounded like a chain-saw. The Fairy god mother tried to calm Cinderella down a bit, she started blabbing about how there is a cure and that every thing is going to be okay…

The moment Cinderella heard there was a cure she started asking a million questions like…“Where is the cure?” or ”What is it made of?” or “Is it healthy?” all the typical questions a mom would ask. The Fairy god mother explained to Cinderella that the cure is in her factory, the cure is made of water and a special potion, the cure tastes like water and it isn’t healthy but Amanda will live.

So Cinderella, the Fairy god mother, the prince and Amanda went to the Fairy god mother’s factory. From the outside they saw a big brown house with a chimney on top, but when they got inside all the walls were full of colours and posters that said were to go if you want to make a potion or find one.

When they got to the potions room they all saw about one thousand potions on five gigantic shelves with about two hundred potions on each! The Fairy god mother flew up with the help of her shiny silver metallic wings and took of the fifth shelf a pink potion that has a picture of a baby and a bunny on it. Then she went into the storage room and took out a baby bottle. The Fairy god mother put the formula in the bottle and said to Cinderella that they should give it to Amanda in the play ground so after she drinks the potion she could play.

They all went to the play ground across the street with the bottle in the Fairy god mothers hand, Amanda in Cinderella’s hands and a half eaten carrot in the princes hand. When they got to the play ground Cinderella heard a familiar sound. It was the sound of someone laughing but an evil laugh. Then when the Fairy god mother was about to feed Amanda the potion Cinderella’s step sisters snatched it from her hand and threw the bottle on the ground. The entire potion flew in the air and landed on the floor!




And They All Did not Live Happily Ever After……
THE END

The before story of Hansel and Gretel

Once upon a time before THE once upon a time before there was a Hansel and before there was a Gretel there was a Hans and there was a Siegfried. Hans was a man of about 20, with sleek black hair, ocean blue eyes that twinkled in the sun, and a dull but kind mind.

Siegfried was a man of about 40, with salt and pepper hair, brown eyes, a slim form and also a dull brain.

Both men were very poor and very hungry. They met one day outside the local superstore and devised a plan to make all their troubles vanish…

 

“Hurry up!” Siegfried whispered, as he and Hans snuck through the back door of Helga’s bakery.

“I’m hurrying, I’m hurrying.” Claus replied, a trace of worry in his voice. They had gone into the bakery theft business when they heard that bakeries had a lot of dough, them not being the brightest bunch (of course) thought that people were referring to money, so first chance they got were in a bakery. After their first successful robbery they realized that although bakeries had money in the cash registers, they were NOT full of the kind of dough they were thinking of. They did enjoy the bread and treats though, so decided to stay in the business as a way of getting food, and also figured it was a good idea because not many other people are in that business.

7 years later Siegfried found himself back in Helga’s bakery for the millionth time, but this time was not like the others. He would usually come to the bakery in secret as a thief, but this time he was here as Helga’s friend. Him and Helga had met a while ago and now were deeply in love with each other. Helga did not have a clue that Siegfried was the one robbing her shop, and ruining her life. They talked in the bakery for a while until Siegfried suggested they go out for dinner. They went to a romantic restaurant and ordered the most expensive thing on the menu.

“Um… I don’t think we should order that,” Helga said, a worried look creased her forehead.

“Why not?” Siegfried replied a puzzled look on his own face.

“well you see I can’t pay for that. I’ve been having some trouble… with the bakery,” she said.

He didn’t know what to say “Oh, I’m so sorry to hear that,” he thought he needed to add something else “so… has there been robberies and theft,” he clapped his hand over his mouth “or um slow business.”

“Someone has been robbing the bakery. Almost every week now 2 men come in and steal absolutely EVERYTHING!” she cried “well at least one of them will soon be caught with a stomach growing the way his is, at least I know someone’s enjoying my baked goods.”

Siegfried looked down at his own growing belly, and then at Helga’s face searching her eyes to make sure she didn’t know it was him, she didn’t have a clue.

 

“Later that very evening Siegfried found himself back in the bakery with a different friend, with Hans. He was busy clearing out the stock room, when Helga’s face popped up in his mind. He wanted to stop but he couldn’t think of another way to get food and money.

As they were on there way out the door Siegfried felt his sides brushing past the door, he knew that if he ate tonights profits he wouldn’t be able to fit next time.

The next week when he came back he had a very queasy feeling in his stomach, and knew he wouldn’t be able to get out the back door without a fight.

As he was forcing his huge body through the door, he heard the sound of sirens as the local police made their rounds. This would be the end of him, he knew he would be caught.

 

He found himself in a jail cell, stuck with 10 years in jail, and a huge amount to pay off.

Hans knew that this was happening, and also knew that he could keep absolutely NO contact with him if he didn’t want to be found out. So he didn’t keep any contact or show any recognition.

Helga figured she had said something wrong and that that was why Siegfried wasn’t keeping in touch with her. She was so overjoyed that the thief was caught.

9 months later Hans was caught as well charged with 10 years as well.

 

The 2 men did not see each other in prison and when they came out went completely separate ways.

Hans went on to marry a lovely wife Greta, while Siegfried married Helga the baker.

 

Siegfried noticed the wrong and harm he had done and decided he had to make the world a sweeter, better place. He wanted everything to be made out of cookies, cake, candy and other treats. He managed to convince Helga without even telling her the real reasoning behind it. They started this dream with their own house. They made most of the walls out of gingerbread covered with icing and candy.

 

Hans found work as a lumberjack, but seeing as that is not a very good business especially when people only want cookies, cakes and candy as building material the market was worse than ever. He once again found himself in the poor house. He tried to get a different job but no one else would hire him seeing as he was an ex-con

 

One terrible day Helga discovered that Siegfried her beloved husband was the one who had ruined her life and business. She was so angry with him that she threatened to leave him and told him she never wanted to see him again.

A few days later Helga realized that she still wanted to be married to him and did want to talk to him and see him. She went to find him, and when the search was finally over she discovered that her beloved Siegfried had died of shame and depression.

 

Helga became very, very, very angry and turned into an evil witch.

She still had the reputation as the towns best baker, and everyone bought her products. She was so angry that she started putting poison in her food, this making hundreds of people die,

 

Hans and Greta were sharing their weekly loaf of bread and cup of milk when a loud gurgling sound came from Greta’s hungry stomach.

“Here you can have my piece of bread,” said Hans, passing her his piece.

Of course they had gotten the bread from Helga’s bakery.

Greta became very weak and died the next day, because the bread was poisoned.

 

Helga’s eyes became very weak because she would spend most of her day crying and rubbing her eyes.

 

Hans married a very evil woman name Hellvetica, and had two children named Hansel and Gretel.

Homework

1. Multi-genre glossaries: adverb, concise and appositive (Mon)

2. Glossary test Monday

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4. Binder Check (Monday)

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Cinderella and the Fat Prince

Once upon a time, in a land far, far away, there was a horrendous, and terribly fat girl named Cinderella. But, apart from her looks, Cinderella had a beautiful soul, and she was so kind that even animals loved her.

Cinderella lived with her cruel stepmother, and amazingly gorgeous stepsister. They both treated Cinderella like a servant, and always made fun of her.

Cinderella hated the fact that she had to do all the work and they never did anything, besides shop and gossip, oh and make fun of her.
One day, a royal messenger stopped right outside their door, and said:
“Hear ye, hear ye, all women in this house, and in all the kingdom, are invited to a royal ball, hosted by the king himself! The purpose of this ball is to find a beautiful woman to marry the prince, and to be the next queen!!” then he rode off on his horse, to the next house.
“That means I can go!” Cinderella cried.
Her stepsister and stepmother burst with laughter.
“Imagine, Cinderella dancing with the prince! Plus, remember what the messenger said, “the purpose of the ball is to find a beautiful woman! You? Beautiful? Never!” cackled her stepsister “I can only think of one who would dance with you, the broom!!”
“But the letter says that every girl is invited,” Cinderella begged.
“So it does,” the stepmother agreed, “You may go- if you get all the work done. And, if you find something to wear!”
“Oh, thank you!” said Cinderella. She dashed up the stairs to her room.
Cinderella pulled a big, and simple dress out of her trunk.
“This was my mother’s dress,” she told the mice.
“Isn’t it pretty? It just needs some fixing up… But it will even fit me! My mother looked just like me, that’s what my father always used to say.”The animals had never seen her this ecstatic before!
A skinny mouse named Jaq thought Cinderella would have the most beautiful gown at the ball, but wasn’t sure about her natural look and size. A fat mouse named Gus agreed, but thought her size would be fine.
Cinderella took out her sewing kit.
“I’ll need a sash and some beads,” she said.
Just then her stepmother shouted, “Cinderella! Cinderella!”
Cinderella rushed downstairs, disappointed.
“Cinderella, do your work,” her stepmother ordered, “And dust the drapes and clean the windows and finish the sewing.”
The mice felt sorry for Cinderella.
“Cinderelly, do this! Cinderelly, do that!” Jaq mocked the cruel stepmother.
“Cinderelly will never be able to fix her dress. Then her stepmother won’t have to let her go to the ball” Gus said.
“Poor Cinderelly,” all the mice agreed.
Someone had an idea.
“Why don’t we fix the dress for Cinderelly? We can fix it!”
Everyone wanted to help finish the dress. Gus and Jaq tip toed into the stepsister’s room. She was busy getting ready for the ball.
“This sash is old,” she yelled.
“You can’t wear these beads, they’re disgusting!” hollered the stepmother. She threw them away. Gus and Jaq took the sash and the beads.
“Pretty, pretty!” Gus whispered in awe.
“Shhh!” Jaq hissed, while he snuck back to the attic.
Soon everyone was busy, measuring, cutting, sewing, working hard, all for Cinderella.
Soon it was time to leave for the ball.
“My, my, Cinderella,” the stepmother sneered. “You are not quite ready, what a pity.”
Cinderella slowly walked up the stairs to her room.
“Oh, well, it's just a royal ball,” she said. “It would be boring, and dull…” Cinderella sighed, “And amazingly fun!”
“Surprize!” shrieked the animals as Cinderella entered.
"Oh, it's amazing! Beautiful! Thank you!" Cinderella cried.
"All for you!" the mice replied as Cinderella was changing.
She rushed downstairs, just in time for them to leave.
"Look! Look! I have a dress! I can go to the ball!" Cinderella shouted with joy.
"Well, well, you do… but Cinderella, really, that ugly fat face would never be fit for the prince. You may come, but double chores tomorrow."
"And," her stepsister said eagerly, "You stole that, and that, and that! These are my clothes, do you understand? Mine, mine, mine! Not yours!" she tore the sashes and beads from Cinderella's dress, leaving her in a big mess of big, dirty rags, they left without another word.
"I don’t understand.." Cinderella sniffed, while she ran outside, onto the bench, "Why.. sniff.. they..sniff.. have to be so cruel to me..sniff.."
Suddenly, a bright light shun in Cinderella's eyes, and a plump, old woman popped out of nowhere!
"Who are you?" asked Cinderella, "And how did you get here? Just, so unexpectedly!"
"Well… for your first question, I am your fairy godmother, for your second, I have one answer, well two actually, magic, and fairy school!" replied the fairy godmother.
"Umm, not trying to be rude, but what are you going to do to me exactly?" said Cinderella, shyly.
"Well, that is 100% up to you, honey, you may have whatever you want!"
"Would it be too much to ask to be skinny and beautiful for once?" said Cinderella, politely.
"Not too much at all," replied the fairy godmother, "And for transportation, that pumpkin will do, and those four mice… yes, yes, that seems right, and also, if you don’t mind, the horse, and dog will make fine coach men!" said the fairy godmother, mostly to herself.
"Oh, thankyou! It has always been my wish to be beautiful, for I am always made fun of for my looks… Even if it only lasts awhile, which reminds me, how long will it last?" said Cinderella.
"Well, you see, none of my spells are permanent, so you will have to be back by midnight, that is when the spell will run out and you will return to your normal, self," responded the fairy godmother.
"That will do, I guess," Cinderella whispered.
"Then off you go to the royal ball! Good bye, Cinderella, good bye!"
"Goodbye! And thank you!"
Cinderella was already in the pumpkin, on her way, when she saw her reflection in a pond across the road, she was beautiful, prettier than her stepsister! This was all her dreams, come true! She was filled with joy, and then she saw it, the glorious, huge, majestic castle, right before her eyes. She ran up the stairs, and outside the ballroom, excited already. As she entered, she felt many eyes on her. She heard things like:
"Beautiful! Magnificent! Glorious!"
Also, she distinctly heard her stepmother say, "Doesn’t she look familiar?" and, "I swear I've seen her before!"
When she finally got past all the staring eyes, she ran straight for the prince, who by now was looking very bored, but when she came to him he light up immediately.
"Would you like to dance?" said the prince to Cinderella, shyly.
"Why, yes, yes I would like to dance with you," replied Cinderella.
They started to dance, and then laugh, and even sing together along with their favorite songs, and they were having an amazing time, until the clock suddenly struck midnight.
"Oh, I must go now, I'm so sorry!" said Cinderella
"Why do you have to go so suddenly?" asked the prince, startled.
"No time to explain, but I had a wonderful time, just wonderful! Good night!" she called after her shoulder.
"But Cinderella!" the prince ran and ran, but could not find her, after looking for awhile, he found a glass slipper, very petite and thin, but beautiful, and he knew two things: it belonged to Cinderella, and he needed to find her right away.
The next day, the prince preformed a search for the one girl who's foot fit perfectly in the slipper, and he would marry her, for he would know it was Cinderella. When Cinderella's stepmother found out about this, at first, she wanted to lock Cinderella up, but then thought:
"She's way too big to fit anyway, so I might as well let her embarrass herself in front of the prince!"
When the prince arrived, Cinderella was first to the door. She tried the slipper on right away, knowing that it was her who had danced with the prince, and was so excited! She closed her eyes, too afraid to look, and then slowly, slowly, inch by inch, she put her chubby toes into the slipper, then her whole foot, but wait, it was stuck! She couldn’t get her foot in! Cinderella was so upset, she wanted to burst with tears!
"Let me try it on now!" snapped the stepsister, "I'm sure it will fit me!"
"Ok, here now, I can just try to slip it right on you now," mumbled the prince, "Oh, my! Oh, my! It fits! It fits! The slipper fits! You, fair maiden, are to be my wife, wedded to me by next week, tomorrow even! Yes! We'll have it tomorrow, be ready by 10:00 am, everyone is invited, even servants!" the prince said, grinning, "You will be the new princess!"
Cinderella ran up to her room sobbing, she was supposed to be the princess! she was the one who danced with the prince and fell in love with him! And now she had to go off and watch him marry someone else, whom she hated.
Just then, her stepmother called, "Cinderella! Oh, Cinderella! Come help your stepsister find a dress for her wedding! And start setting up the party room for tomorrow night! Chop, chop‼"
"Coming!" Cinderella yelled, as she wiped all the tears from her face, even though it was probably still reddened.
"Cinderella, why were you crying? Do you have an issue with the marriage arrangement? Even you know that you would never be standing up there, about to marry a prince! You probably won't even ever marry with those terrible looks!" bragged the stepmother, "But no time for talking now, get to work!"
Cinderella fitted the dress, and cleaned the palace, and finally was done all the work, when she realized the wedding was in an hour and she had nothing to wear, and didn’t think anything besides rags would ever fit her. So she made a decision, she would wear the rags of the dress she was planning on wearing to the ball, she didn’t care if it was ripped, she had no one to impress, and no one to love.
At the wedding, after the ceremonies, both families had lunch together, to get to know each other. At first Cinderella didn’t feel like family, but she thought,
"If my stepmother will allow me, then I should allow myself!" and she went along with this thought until she saw how beautiful and handsome everyone in the royal family was. She felt so intimidated, that she was about to get up and leave, when suddenly she saw a fat, ugly man, but he was wearing a royal crown! She couldn’t believe her eyes, a fat and ugly prince? It couldn’t be!
"Umm, would you like to dance?" whispered Cinderella, very shyly.
"Would I? I mean yes, I would love to," he said, awkwardly.
So they danced and danced, and after awhile, Cinderella fell in love with him, she also found out that he is the prince's stepbrother, and was not treated as well as him, for he was ugly and fat. After she heard this she said, "So, you are royal, but because you are not blood related family, or good looking, they treat you badly?"
"Well, yes, that’s it," replied the fat prince.
"Then you know exactly how I feel! Because I am the new princess's stepsister, and she and her mother treat me badly, just because I'm ugly!"
"Then I do know how you feel, and you know how I feel, and that’s never happened to me before," said the fat prince, "Umm, Cinderella, I've also never felt so in love with someone before, I don’t care how you look, I just love you for who you are! So Cinderella, will you marry me?" asked the fat prince.
"Yes, I will, yes, I am delighted! We will live somewhere far away, and yes! Oh, yes! I love you too!" replied Cinderella.
"Really? Well, why don’t we have the wedding as soon as possible then, it doesn’t have to be a royal one, just a small ceremony, maybe not even with our family! umm, does that sound ok to you?"
"Well, I would like some friends to be there, well their not even people, but they do talk, um, my animals, mice and birds, that’s all really," said Cinderella, "I can't believe it, me? a princess? Oh, my!"
So the next year, just to make sure they wanted it, they got married, far, far away, with all the animals.
And they lived together, happily ever after.

Joelle 6a

Sisterella

Twisted Fairy Tale: Sisterella

Once upon a time, in a far far away land there lived one stubborn, greedy, and selfish little girl named Cinderella. Cinderella had a wonderful, kind mother who became very sick, and after two months, passed away. Cinderella took all her sadness and anger out on herself, and became even more evil and stubborn.

After a sad, depressing year for the stubborn, angered Cinderella, Cinderella’s father decided to re-marry. His new wife brought along her sweet, smart, and caring daughters. As soon as Cinderella looked at the stepsisters, she wanted absolutely nothing to do with them. But on the other hand, they were thrilled to have another sister!

Cinderella’s stepmother liked her and wanted her to be happy so she forced her two stepdaughters to do all the chores. The stepmother would also spoil Cinderella with extra dresses, jewelry, and gifts. As you would guess, Cinderella accepted every one of them without even a ‘thank you’.

One sunny morning, Cinderella awoke to hearing cries of, “The Royal Ball is today!” The two stepsisters woke up Cinderella, and she got very angry at them. “Get out of my room NOW!!” responded Cinderella as she yanked out her earplugs. “B-but we don’t know what to wear!” wined Stepsister #1.

“Like I care! Go ask your sister! GOOD NIGHT!” Cinderella snapped.

“Oh but you don’t understand you see, there is the prince, who will not only dance with you at the ball, but he is deciding who to MARRY!” Stepsister #2 reminded Cinderella.

“If I lend you each ONE of my dresses will you just get lost?” said Cinderella.

“Yes! Can we choose?” asked Stepsister #1 politely.

“Whatever! I don’t care, just be quiet and don’t you DARE touch anything else of mine, or ill get you!” Cinderella pulled her eye patches above her eyes and snored off into a deep sleep.

At about noon, Cinderella woke up after a terrifying dream…well so she thought. Stepmother walked into Cinderella’s dark, spooky room.

“Cinderella, aren’t you going to the Royal Ball?” she asked.

“No! I don’t feel like it!” Cinderella said loudly.

Stepmother left the room quickly. Everyone knew to leave her alone when she was in a bad mood!

Cinderella had a very big headache and went for a walk in the garden. Suddenly, a bolt of lightening hit the ground. A thin lady jumped out of it.

“Hello Cinderella, I have been sent by your loving mother. I am your Fairy God Mother- Therapist!” she said.

She introduced herself, and her and Cinderella had a little talk, and got to know each other.

“I do want to change, but I don’t know how to!” said Cinderella.

“That’s what I’m here for!” replied Fairy God Mother- Therapist. “But I’ve got to go!” With a flick of her magical wand and a ‘Bipity Bopity Boop!’ she disappeared off into her land.

“I feel…different,” Cinderella said to herself. “Almost as if…I MUST CHANGE! Well, that’s what I must do!”

Cinderella decided to surprise the two stepsisters with a warm welcoming. As soon as the two daughters came in the door, before Cinderella could say anything, Stepsister #2 announced, “I’m marrying the Prince! The glove fit!” Stepsister #1 rolled her eyes and went up to her room. Cinderella felt bad for her.

The very next day, Stepsister #2 came running inside the house with tears all over her pale face. “H-he divorced me! All because the magical glove didn’t fit!” Just then, the Prince knocked at the door.

“Hello, I was just wondering if this glove would fit any other person in this house?” he asked curiously.

“Me! Me!” Stepsister #1 cried.

Well, it did fit, and the Prince took Stepsister #1 into his arms, and they galloped back to the palace in the fading, pink sunset. After about a year, Cinderella felt that she should go visit her stepsister. As soon as the Princes’ eyes met Cinderella’s, he fell in love with her. You see, Cinderella had changed over the year. Infact, she had become sweet and kind. That same cloudy day, Stepsister #1 got very mad at the Prince because she could see him falling in love with Cinderella. After a day or so, she divorced him, and went back home.

Cinderella sat by her window and looked at the stars. She watched the horses graze on the wet grass. Cinderella jumped up when she heard the sirens of the Prince come to her house. She heard the Prince on his grey horse gallop to the front entrance. Cinderella thought to herself, ‘What is going on?!’. While pulling on her fluffy robe and slippers, Cinderella ran downstairs almost tripping on the last stair, and opened the door

Just as Cinderella suspected, it was the Prince running to the door step.

“Cinderella, I have fallen in love with you. I’ve seen how you’ve changed so much over the year. Will you marry me?” the Prince said panting.

“Yes!” cried Cinderella as she jumped into his arms. Cinderella and the Prince ended up living happily ever after. On the other hand, the Stepsisters turned evil and started to hate Cinderella, at times they plotted to kill her. Even with all of this hatred towards her, Cinderella was, and stayed extremely nice forever.

Leor's draft #1

Doug in Uggs®

Once upon a time in a beautiful city called New York lived a very successful business man who had three sons. When he died, he left a will. His company was left to his eldest son, his mansion to his middle son and only his pet dog, Doug to his youngest son, Josh.

Josh sat under a shady oak tree, feeling very miserable and sorry for himself.

“What will become of us, Doug?” asked Josh in a weary, annoyed tone. To Josh’s complete amazement, Doug answered him. Josh owned a talking dog!

“Please don’t worry master” Doug said in a sure sounding voice, “Just listen to me and do as I say and you will be much richer than both your brothers!”

Now you see, Josh was very poor and had nothing to lose by listening to the dog so he did as Doug commanded him to do (even though he thought of himself as crazy for talking to a dog and letting a dog tell him what to do).

Doug commanded of Josh to get him a fine collar and some nice Uggs to go with his collar.

Later that day after Josh spent all of his remaining money on Doug, Doug set out to the mall to buy a pair of sunglasses, then he set off to the wondrous home of the celebrity to give her his present.

Obviously nobody had ever met a talking dog so Doug was sent to see the celebrity immediately.

Doug was sent into a room with a high ceiling and chairs with soft, velvet covering. The floor was covered with a hard, rough wood covering and as Doug waited for the celebrity to call for him to come in he thought of what he should say to her.

When Doug walked into the big room in which the celebrity was, he was fascinated by her great beauty.

“I heard that you had asked to see me” the celebrity asked

“Yes,” replied Doug “My master, Josh, sent me to bring this gift to you” continued Doug handing the package to the celebrity. Now, everybody knows that you shouldn’t take presents from strangers but the celebrity was so amazed of this talking dog that she just simply replied,

“Tell your master that I thank him and you can go”

The following day Doug bought a purse and once more brought it to the celebrity, with the same message: “This is from my master”

For several days, Doug went on bringing the celebrity very fine gifts.

One day, Doug heard a rumor that the celebrity would be coming into town to perform so he hurried back to Josh (who was barely surviving because he did not have very much food) and asked him to go swimming in the public pool.

“Why should I listen to you?” Josh asked in a disgusted tone, “thanks to you I have barely enough food to survive and every day I have to beg people for money”

Doug was not surprised by this reply so he simply reminded Josh of the promise he had made to him.

While Josh was swimming in the pool, Doug hid all his ripped, torn clothes. When he saw the celebrity’s limousine approaching, he started shouting for help.

“Help!” cried Doug “robbers have stolen my master’s clothes!”

When the celebrity recognized the dog, she immediately called to her maid to bring a fresh pair of clothes from her house.

“It must be made of the best fabric” said the celebrity “and it must be of the best cut, only the best will do for this dog’s master!”

Once Josh was dressed in his new clothes, Josh looked very handsome.

While Josh was getting dressed Doug ran ahead to the nearest mall and saw some open stores

“The celebrity is coming in her limousine and would surely want to come into the mall” Doug explained, “When she asks who this very fine mall belongs to, say it belongs to Josh the master of Doug, or I will send you all to court!”

As you all know Americans do not like to be bossed around, especially by talking dogs, and they very much did not like Doug’s idea so they sent him to the Pound.

When the celebrity passed by the mall she wanted to go in, as Doug had interpreted, and again as he had interpreted she asked who the lovely mall belonged to, obviously the storeowners answered that the mall belonged to the government.

Meanwhile, sitting on a log, was Josh waiting for Doug to come back and tell him what to do, just then the paper boy came with the daily paper, and Josh having nothing better to do took one and started reading.

To his great amazement, on the front page of the paper was the title: “talking dog now in the pound on account of threatening store owners,” and with that Josh completely lost it, he started tearing his hair and his clothes in rage shouting angrily: “that dog! I let a dog tell me what to do! How could I have done such a stupid thing!?!?”

Just then the celebrity drove by in her big stretch limousine. Now, the celebrity had never actually seen Josh, she had only heard about him from a talking dog and when she passed by the clothes she had given him were so torn and ripped that she didn’t recognize them either, so all she saw in Josh was a poor homeless man. Poor Josh watched in horror as the celebrity passed by him without noticing him.

Many years passed after that and the celebrity was becoming very famous. Unlike the celebrity Josh was suffering from many diseases and of starvation until it was his time to leave this world along with Doug who got bitten by a vicious dog very severely and passed away.

As you are probably wondering why Josh listened to Doug in the first place and got himself into that mess, well as a child Josh read many books but one in particular grabbed his attention right from the first page, it was about a poor boy who had a talking cat and because of his cat he was married to the princess, Josh was hoping the same would happen to him and he would live happily ever after, obviously that did not work. THE END

Draft #1

LIONS FOR LUNCH AND ZEBRAS FOR DINNER

On a beautiful sunny day Mouse was carrying a basket of cheese for lunch at school. He was walking by a beach house and he stopped and asked in a soft and shy voice, “ Hello, anybody there?”

A loud voice snapped, “ I eat lions for lunch and zebras for dinner and come in if you dare.” Mouse screamed and ran away to see Monkey, his best friend, and stammered, “ T-there’s a-a lo-oud vo-oice inside that house and it-it sounds re-ally scary. I was wondering if you could try to scare him away pl-lease?”

“ Of course, I have scared people away before so it should be easy to scare too.” exclaimed Monkey.

They walked to the house and Monkey did a huge loud growl and a loud voice said, “ I eat lions for lunch and zebras for dinner so come in if you dare.”

Monkey was so scared that Mouse and Monkey asked all of the animals at the beach to scare the loud voice. The animals were so scared except for Tiger. Tiger yelled at the loud voice that was scary and mean. A tall blue monster ran out of the house running awkwardly around the yard and he was so scared.

Tiger questioned all the animals, “ Where are you guys off to?”
Mouse said, “ We are all off to school down at the beach. Would you guys like to come with us?”

Tiger asked the monster if he wanted to go to school. Monster said “ Yeah, that would be great so I can make new friends.”

Monkey pleaded, “ let’s go, we don’t want to be late or Mrs. Dolphin will give us a detention.” All of animals laughed and laughed as they were walking to school.

snow white-continued

Snow White- continued- by Hana 6a

“Once upon a time lived a sweet, little girl named Snow White she was very loved, but one day her step mom tried to kill her...”

Okay, so you guys all know that story, right? Well, now I’m back in the palace with my husband, my father, the adorable 7 dwarfs, the looking mirror and my stupid, evil, ANNOYING step mom! And no, I’m not alone with my husband in a wonderful castle WITHOUT my step mom.

It has been 5 years, and now I finally feel like it is the time for me to get revenge on that Queen. I was thinking and thinking, but I had a blank out. Then, I got a great idea to ask my Step mom’s trusty looking mirror for help!

“Looking mirror, oh looking mirror, I want revenge on my step mother, but I have no idea what to do! Any ideas?”

“Yes, yes, how about you do exactly what your step mom did to you?”

“You mean send my hunter to kill her...?”

“Of course that is what I mean!!” replied the looking mirror.

“Well, since its you, the famous looking mirror, always with good ideas, I guess I will do that!”

The next day I sent my hunter to go kill my Step mom in the middle of the woody, leafy, grassy, forest, and of course I sent him to the exact emerald colored tree where she tried to kill me! If I was going to go through with this plan I was going to do it right!

“Excuse me, hunter, umm, why do you have a silver knife in your back pocket?” asked the Queen (step mom) anxiously while she and the hunter were speeding through the forest.

“I don’t know how to truthfully say this to you but, umm...you know what I’m just going to come out and say it! Snow White wants revenge, so she sent me to come kill you, but I’m not going to kill you! Because one day you and Snow White will have to resolve your issues.”

“Thank you for not killing me! It means the world! But what should I do now?”

“Go past the 7 huge hills and stay calm! Everything will fall into place!”

So, my Step mom went past the 7 huge hills (just like me) and then she finally found a place...

“I wonder who lives in this little cute shack...” said the Queen (to herself) as she was opening the door to the house.

While my mother was searching through the house she realized everything was by sevens; 7 plates, 7 beds, 7 chairs, 7 baths. The beds were small, large, tall, thin and wide. Each bed had a name imprinted on it the first was humble then mate, then silly, pettish, jolly, drowsy and the 7th was sniffles.

Finally after about 3 hours my Step mom met the owners of the shack...

“Excuse me! Who are you? and why are you in our house, you know this isn’t a community center, it’s the 7 girl dwarfs house!!!!!” said pettish furiously.

“Well, I’m the Queen, but my step daughter is mad at me cause...its embarrassing..I tried to kill her, because she was the fairest lady of them all and i wanted to be that. Now I have realized I shouldn’t have done that, but she is still mad...”

“I see..” said jolly curiously...

“So can i stay with you guys?”

“Sure,” said Silly, before anyone else could get a word in.

“Wait, do you know the 7 dwarfs by any chance?” asked Humble, Mate and Drowsy.

“Yes, yes I do. They love my step daughter, Snow White, but there not fond of me...”

“Oh you can for sure stay with us then, we DESPISE those boys!” said the 7 girl dwarfs.

“Thank you so much! I promise I will follow what ever you girls say.”

“You can do whatever you want just don’t let ANYONE in. You never know, it could be your step daughter...” said sniffles in a calm but scared voice.

The 7 girl dwarfs let my evil Step mom stay with them. She never thought that I knew about her staying with the dwarfs, but I knew...I even asked the trusty looking mirror for some more help!

“Looking mirror, oh looking mirror I need some (more) help! I know where my Step mom is! She’s alive and fine, living with the 7 girl dwarfs. What should I do?”

“Snow White, I already told you what to do!”

“Oh yah, do what she did to me...”

Just like what my Step mom did to me, I went into disguise as an ugly, old woman, and it was perfect because she didn’t suspect one thing!

“Knock, knock, knock” That was me, knocking on the door, of the 7 girl dwarfs house in the middle of the day, while they were at work!

“Hello? Who is it?” answered my Step mom through the window.

“Its me, the old woman selling goodies” I answered.

“I’m not aloud to let anyone in! So please leave.” replied my mother.

“Just have one of my apples, there fresh from the apple trees in my garden. It would make my day if you would have a little bit of the tasty white part” I said happily.

Right before my Step mom was going to eat the apple I just knew I couldn’t do this anymore! So I took off my disguise and told her the truth. By then the 7 girl dwarfs were already there. So I told them all how I was sorry. Also, I said that I wanted them to come to my palace (including my Step mom) and they could live with me! Instead of having to work every day in those dirty gold mines.

“That sounds great! Although we have a slight issue.” said the cute little dwarfs.

“What might that problem be?” I answered.

“The 7 dwarfs and us don’t get along very well. Long story short, 10 years ago we got into a fight about our gold mines, sense then we haven’t spoken...”

“Don’t worry about them! They have grown up and gotten way nicer, right mother?” I said.

“Actually my daughter is right, the dwarfs are much nicer now!” answered my mother in a friendly tone of voice.

“Pack your bags and lets get on the road!” I said while excited.

* * *

It’s been 2 years and a lot has changed! First of all, My Step mom and I love each other. I convinced the dwarfs that (both the girls and boys) are kind people and funny enough all 14 of them are married to one another; Bashful and Humble, Doc and Mate, Dopey and Silly, Grumpy and Pettish, Happy and Jolly, Sleepy and Drowsy, last but not least Sneezy and Sniffles, these are the new happily married couples! As for the rest of us, were fine to!

“And they all lived happily ever after in their palace. The end.”

Draft #1 of Hasel and Gretel and the Supernanny

Once upon a time there were two, no good, stinking rotten, horrible children who were VERY badly behaved. Their names were Hansel and Gretel. They lived in the countryside in England on the edge of a forest.
Now, their father always told them to never go into the woods. He used to tell them stories about wicked monsters that would eat you up in a second’s flash. But Hansel and Gretel, being terribly behaved children, went into the woods anyway.
Their feet went crunch, crunch as they walked in the pitch-black forest. They soon became lost and decided to sleep until morning and then start looking for a way back home.

Enter the Witch: “I always wear black. I look down and I see my nose. It has a big mole on it and on that, little tiny hairs growing. All my teeth have rotten. My hair is thin and gray. I have wrinkles on my face that a 200-year-old man wouldn’t have. I have been watching those children they call Hansel and Gretel, all their lives. I have been waiting for them. Nobody knows who I really am.”

When Hansel and Gretel woke up, Gretel cried, “ Oh Hansel! How are we ever going to get out of these woods?”
“Don’t worry Gretel”, replied Hansel calmly, “we’ll get out of here. Come, lets go try find a way home.”
For the next two hours, they wandered the forest, until suddenly the forest opened out into a clearing. In the middle of that clearing was a little house. In front of that house was an old, scary looking woman. The children cowered but shouted to the old woman, “You show us the way back to our house or we’ll beat you up!”
“Stop!” shouted the woman, holding out something that looked like a stick, but the children knew better.
“I have been waiting you for many years. You are here for a reason. You are here to learn to be good children. Some call me the Witch, some call me a Supernanny. Take your pick.”
“We’re not having any of it you old hag!” said Hansel. But there was magic afoot, and their fate was already cast. Hansel and Gretel started to back away but the Witch had already raised her wand and the trees and their branches moved together to make a shield of leaves that no one could get through. Hansel and Gretel had to listen.
“Come along now children”, said the Witch. And the children obeyed and followed her into the little house.

For the next while, it was as if time was suspended in that clearing. The children learned many things whilst with the Witch, a.k.a. Supernanny, for that was what they called her now. They learned the practice of loving and kindness, good manners, and how to obey and listen. They were sad and joyous when they had to go home. They knew they would miss the old Supernanny. They had learned to love her for the way she was. They said their goodbyes and the Supernanny, with a flick of her wand, sent them home again.


-Josha R.

Pascale and the Poutine draft 1

The defining sound of the crowd cheering Alexandre Bilodeau’s name was amazing. He had just won the first gold medal for Canada in the winter Olympics 2010! He was sprinting around the crowd high-fiving everyone with in arms distance. The shriek of the children’s in the crowd’s excitement was just making Alex the most blissful person in the world!

Who wouldn’t be happy? He has a wonderful family and is a proud Canadian! His mom, Dad and brother will always be cheering him on.

There was one thing in the entire world he wants that he doesn’t already have, and that is a wife. She has to be mesmerizing, fascinating and something... something about her that no one else has! Someone to stand by him through big wins and big losses.

Mr. and Mrs. Bilodeau want Alex to be happy, but they have one condition regarding his marriage. The lucky girl has to be French-Canadian. Alex wants to respect his parents, but he’s on a quest to find true love, no matter where she’s from!

As the Bilodeaus are getting ready for bed in their secret Vancouver home, Pascale Dubois is Downtown having the time of her life!

Pascale is downtown looking at the Olympic cauldron, it’s so beautiful, a real piece of art. Suddenly with Pascale’s bad luck, it starts to rain. Pounding drops of water falling like baby’s crying. Pascale is from Montreal so she is used to the rain, but not this much rain. So she decides it’s time to find her apartment.

After two hours of looking for her apartment she gives up and decides to see if anybody's house lights are on. Luckily she sees a glimpse of a bright light shining like a star turning off in a big but secretive house surrounded by colossal sized evergreen trees.

Pascale approaches the door slowly, not knowing what to expect. With her small frail hands she bangs on the door with all her might. The enormous door opens slowly. A feminine figure comes out of the shadow.

“Dear, what are you doing on my doorstep soaking at midnight?” asks Mrs. Bilodeau sinisterly.

“My apologies, I’m Pascale Dubois, I’m lost and I can’t find my way home!” Pascalle replies politely, starting to lightly cry.

“Please come in let’s get you some warm clothes and a delicious cup of herbal tea!” replied Mrs. Bilodeau now sounding friendly.

“Thank you so much Mrs....?” Pascale says as she sits down her wet body on the beautiful couch.

“Bilodeau!” says Mrs. Bilodeau.

“Bilodeau? As in The Alexandre Bilodeau’s mom?” asks Pascale in a surprised voice.

“Yes, why don’t you take a hot relaxing bath and then you can meet my husband and son Alex!”

“That would be amazing thank you so much for your generosity.”

After Pascale is finished bathing Alex, Mr. and Mrs. Bilodeau are all waiting for her in the big living room. When Pascalle walks in, Alex’s face expression turns from tired to Oh My Goodness she is mesmerizing. Her long blonde curly hair is stunning! For both of them it feels like they are the only people in the whole entire world. As if they were long lost soul mates finally finding each other.

As the night went on Pascale explained that she was here visiting from Montreal! It was her first night here and she couldn’t find her apartment!
The more Pascale talked, the more Alex was intrigued to listen more. She is fascinating!

It’s very late almost two a.m. and everyone is extremely tired from a long day. Alex, such a gentleman offers for Pascale to sleep in his bed and he’ll sleep on the couch. Pascale gladly excepts!

Mrs. Bilodeau doesn’t believe Pascale is French-Canadian and decides she will put a dish of poutine under seven mattresses for Pascale to sleep on. This test will show if she is a Real French-Canadian.

When all the Bilodueas are sleeping, Pascale is wide awake struggling to find a comfortable position in her bed. She can feel something under her bed that is mushy, but smells really good, smells like Montreal.

In the morning for breakfast they have a French-Canadian delicacy. Poutine, French fries coded in gravy and cheese curd. Pascale has had poutine before but she was smart, and she knew thats what she slept on.

“How was your sleep last night?” asked Mrs. Bilodeau knowing she slept on top of poutine.

“It was very generous of you to let me stay, but I think some sly woman must have snuck poutine under my bed!” Pascale responds trying to guilt Mrs. Bilodeau into confessing.

“Oh, that’s odd! I wonder who would have done that!” responds Mrs. Bilodeau.

Across the table Mrs. Bilodeau could see Alex staring at Pascale with amazement. She was mesmerizing, fascinating and something... something about her that no one else had!

“I believe you are from Montreal, and I know you love each other, so I give you my blessing!” Mrs. Bilodeau says enthusiastically.

“I do too!” Mr. Bilodeau says.

Alex got on one knee and proposed to Pascale. “Pascale Dubois, will you marry me, Alexandre Bilodeau?”

“Yes!” replies Pascale with excitement!

The wedding is fantastic! The beautiful white as snow dress on Pascale is mesmerizing! She is the most beautiful person in the world right now!

This is the best day of Alex and Pascale’s life! They are so happy to find true love! Now Alex can go on next winter Olympics and win Gold again, but now he’ll have a wife to share the glory with!

To remember how wonderful poutine can be, in Alex and Pascale’s new house beside his gold medal is a recipe for poutine! To Alex they are equally important!

Different things bring different people together, who would have guessed poutine would bring a gold medalist together with an ordinary young lady!

The Three rapping pigs and the Ruler wolf

Once upon a time there were three rapping pigs and there names were Rappo, Rappy and Rappster . Before they were all going to rapping history they were all talking to there 2nd ruler dad and he said

"Whatever you rap do it the best you can because that's how you get better at rapping in the world." the pigs sat at the table making the best raps they could think of. They went out of their rapping home and one pig rapped about love and one pig rapped about hatred and horror and Rappster rapped about rapping songs.

Two days later the rapper ruler wolf zoomed out of nowhere and he rapped

"If you don't stop rapping I'll take over your car I'm gonna rap rap rap till I'll blow you far" the ruler wolf owned Rappo and blew him away he went to Rappy and he said

"If you don't stop rapping I'll take over your car I'm gonna rap rap rap till I blow you far" sadly Rappy literally got his mind blown away and for Rappster he had a song so awesome that everyone in the world could hear it and thought it was beautiful but the ruler wolf could take it and he said

"If you don't stop rapping I''l take over your car I'm gonna" "O.k. O.k. your gonna blow me far well not today because I'm gonna blow you far hmm hmm I know you trying hard to blow me far but I know you just can't so I'll take your car even though your a wolf I can beat you so hard I'll go easy on you so you won't fall apart I can get you of my back because you dumb as a shack." The ruler wolf was amazed of good that rap was and he said

"Dude you sound so good I think I'll let you be on my side if I could be in your hood." Rappster agreed and they were best buddies till the end.

The Real Story

The Real Story

So you think you know this story. Most likely they just fooled you with a sweet version of it. Probably, by now you are ready to learn the truth. So, let me tell you the events as they really happened.

Krechnitz is a tiny village at the edge of a large and dark forest in the middle of Eastern Europe. A river ran through the middle of the village. At best of times Krechnitz was home to no more than two hundred families. Most of them were followers of the court of the Vishnitzer Rebbe. Also, all of them were really poor.

On the outskirts of town lived a family unlike any other. They were so poor they only had one bed, which they had to share between the four of them. They were most unfortunate. However, the two children were the luckiest kids in the world. They just didn’t know it yet.

From what I know, Mentl and Shmentl were quite a few years apart. Mentl was 11 years old and he had chocolate brown hair with bright blue eyes that shimmered in the light. Lets just put it this way: he was tall and handsome. His younger sister Shmentl was 7 years old. She had rosy cheeks and freckles all across her face. The thing that really made her stand out however was her long, fiery red hair!

The problem with Mentl and Shmentl was that they had set their minds to be pure evil!

They made a plan that they thought would make them powerful! Their plan was… to throw everyone’s food and water into the river running through the village. And so they did, without realizing they were not going to have any food for themselves either. All there was left in town was a single loaf of bread. This gave them another idea… let’s get rid of our parents, so we can have the bread all to ourselves! We can’t stand the idea of having parents anyway so it won’t be such a loss.

Obviously, this made their parents very sad. Time was running out for the parents to teach their children a lesson. Mentl and Shmentl came up with the plan to take their parents for a trip in to the dark forest. After sunset they would run back home, leaving their parents all alone, in the night, in the dark. They just needed to leave a trail of thorns in order to find their way back home. Now of course, the parents knew both this part of the fairy tale and the forest quite well, so they were not too concerned. Instead, they decided to lure the kids towards the house of the Fairy of Goodness.

The house of the Fairy of Goodness was entirely made of lollypops….Any kid would be excited, but not Mentl and Shmentl. You might have guessed by now these kids were different, very different. They must have been the only children in the world hating lollypops! The kids tried to trick the Fairy by pretending to be good, the Fairy was tricking the kids by pretending to be evil! “Hello, little children…Let me guess, you want to get rid of your parents, no? HAHAHAHAA!!!!” she shrieked. “Well, uh, yes” the kids answered. “Well, what are you waiting for? Give them a lollypop!” The children gave their parents a lollypop and right after the first lick the parents pretended to fall asleep. “Wow”, said Mentl, “how long will they sleep?” The Fairy answered “for a thousand years! In the meantime you can stay here, but don’t try to steal the treasure!” “The treasure?” the children asked? “We want that treasure!!” “If you want my treasure” said the Fairy, “you have to do exactly as I tell you, ask no questions!” “Agreed!” said the children. “Promise?” asked the Fairy, “promise!” said the children. “Alright, here is your first task”, said the Fairy. “I need you to go to the kitchen and wash all the dishes. I didn’t clean anything for three years and you have twenty-four hours to do the job!” The kids were about to say no, but that would make them loose the treasure….The kitchen was so dirty that they first had to clean the floor and the table and the sink before they could even start with the dishes. Because the kitchen had no running water they first had to go out to the river to get water, make a fire to warm it up and then start cleaning. Before they had finished the dishes they had to go back and forth to the river three times. They worked very hard, stayed up the whole night and just before running out of time finished cleaning the last plate. By now, they were totally exhausted and wanted to sleep. “Well”, said the Fairy “you can sleep, but then you first have to swipe the bedroom floor, clean the mattress and wash the sheets!”. “What??” asked the children we never did that!” “Do I hear you protest? Do you want to lose the treasure?” asked the Fairy. So, Mentl and Shmentl knew what to do and although they could hardly keep their eyes open fetched another pail of water and cleaned the bedroom floor and washed and dried the sheets. By the time they were ready to fall asleep they were hungry from all the hard work and asked the Fairy for some food. “You think this is a restaurant?” asked the Fairy. “If you want food, you go to the kitchen and make it yourself!” “But, we have never done this before” cried the children. “You want to lose the treasure?” asked the Fairy. And so Mentl and Shmentl made a fire, found some mushrooms in the forest and made themselves some soup.

By now, you must have gotten the picture. The Fairy made them work and work and work for weeks and weeks. Seven weeks to tell you the truth. And then, when the Fairy thought the time had come she asked them if they were ready for the final test. “Mentl and Shmentl, are you ready? Here comes the final and most difficult test of all. No one has ever succeeded yet…” “Of course” said Mentl full of confidence “anything you say!” The Fairy told them to put on their shoes and walk back to Krechnitz and not come back! “But…” tried Mentl “how does that make sense?” “Are you trying to question me Mentl?” asked the Fairy “do you want to lose the treasure?” And so the children went back in to the forest on the long walk back home.

When they came back to Krechnitz things had changed quite a lot. All the people of Krechnitz had left since there was no more food. Mentl and Shmentl had thrown everything in to the river. Their little house was dusty and dark and still and quite miserable. It made them feel lonely and scared. They missed the Fairy and to tell you the truth, they missed their Mommy and Daddy…

Without wasting a minute, they ran back in to forest and didn’t stop until they came back to the lollypop house. “We don’t want to be alone, we don’t want to be without you and we don’t want to leave our sleeping Mommy and Daddy behind! We don’t care about your treasure anymore! Please, don’t send us away” they cried, as the tears were rolling down their freckled cheeks. “You have just found the treasure!” said the Fairy of Goodness. “Go kiss your Mommy and Daddy on their cheeks so they will wake up. The biggest treasure in life is to feel love and I think you have learned this lesson today”.

The kids ran to their parents who had been waiting for them all this time. And they hugged and kissed and celebrated with the Fairy who had made a beautiful dinner with soup and chicken and potatoes and salad and Kugel for desert! The next day they said farewell and walked back to Krechnitz.

Today Krechnitz is a big city with more then one hundred thousand Jews and five big synagogues. And everybody fondly remembers the story of how Reb Mentl and Froome Shmentl had worked hard to make Krechnitz the most beautiful community of the middle of Eastern Europe!