hi everyone are we supposed to write a response on David Greenberg due Monday or are we writing it in class?
-Shakaed
Saturday, November 24, 2007
Help with 6A assignment
Hi Gang,
I want you to think back to David Greenberg's presentation and reflect on the parts that were important to you. What did he say that applies to your writing? What did you find interesting about his presentation? What can you use in your own poems? What surprised/interested you?
Looking forward to a good discussion on Monday.
PS I'm really enjoying reading your poems. Adam's poem on soccer and Mikaela's poem are very different, yet capture emotions wonderfully. Make sure you check them out, and tell them what you thought.
-Mr. G.
Mikaela's poem
Mikaela,
Your poem is a beautiful tribute. You've chosen such powerful words to express very strong emotions, and maintained such a nice sense of cadence and rhyme. This really is a moving piece.
-Mr. G.
The Game Is On My Line
the spinning blur of black and white
come to me
just a foot away
I know what to do
I take a step in the freezing rain
and soar into the air
I'm like a bird gracefully flying
I'm getting closer
i can almost touch the blur
i fall hard to the ground but
the blur breaks the the fall
i get up and kick the blur which is now a ball
and then soaring in the air it turns into
a spinning blur of black and white
Mikaela,
I only remember 1 and I think its this one,
to care for your writing
sorry I don't remember either
-Janine
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