Seth's Reflections

I learned a lot from this writing process. I learned how to use proper dialogue and I also learned a lot about sensory language, how to use it and when. I learned about leads not only for the fractured fairy take but how to make effective leads and what not to do to make it an ineffective lead. I also learned about helping other people with their stories with effective feedback. We learned about conclusions to stories, how to make a satisfying ending for the reader and not to disappoint the reader. We also learned about how to organize a story and to make sure that it is in order so that it is clear to the reader.

Reflections

I learned that writing a story (fairytale) doesn't take just one draft and then your done , it takes time.
I learnedhow to use more sensory
language more,and dialogue. When we first started, I thought it was pretty easy, but as we continued into all our drafts there was much I didn't know. I didn't know that much about
usingsensory language in a way to grab the reader in my story, and I didn't know about how to properly write a good feedback comment.
I also found that the comments people gave back to me helped a lot, too. They gave me ideas of what to add, what to take out, and what was good or bad.
The rubric our whole class put together was also very helpful!

Josha's Reflections

Since we have started this whole fairy tale business I have learned a great many new things. For example, I have learned how to use proper dialogue (Before we learned about dialogue, I never used to pay attention to it), sensory language, grammar, and proof reading. I found out for myself that doing lots of different drafts really helps improve on your writing. I was very surprised when I saw my 1st draft and then I saw my final draft. I couldn't believe the improvement!

-Josha Rafael

Eleane's reflections on her fractured fairy tale

I learned many things from our fractured fairy tales for example:

How to proofread, how to make a distinct beginning, middle and end, proper dialogue, exceptional sensory language, and that you need to make many drafts to even get close to making a significant story!

Thank you Mr. Gelmon for your help through this amazing journey through my 1st 2nd and 3rd draft and hope you can take me on many more adventures through writing!

Looking forward to the rest of the year with you!

Sincerely,

Eleane

What I learned during our fractured fairy tale unit

I learned from my fractured fairy tales unit a lot of thing like how to write stories all over again, proper use of dialogue, using a tone of sensory language, how distinctive the begging, middle and end are and how there are so many different levels of writing you have to do before the finale draft. One of the main things i learned is that a paragraph doesn't have to be 5-7 sentences a paragraph is on one idea and is can be three sentences or twelve sentences. I also learned how to how to proofread. I enjoyed this unit!

-Shayla

Reflections By Izzy

I have learned a lot from all the writing we did leading up to our fractured fairy tales. For example, I learned about proper dialogue, how to use sensory language, how to plan out my stories and how to proofread. I also learned that it takes quite a few drafts to get a story right. The first one is just the start and it helps to have people read your story and give you feedback so you can fix things you didn't notice.

Dani's Reflections

I learned many things form the fractured fairy tales unit. One of the most important skills I learned was dialogue. I found that dialogue is very important in ones story because it can show the personality, depth, and being of your character. I learned the actual rules for dialogue, along with how to use it properly. I learned how to mark others on there work while being helpful to not only them but to myself. I learned how to tell what grade I would be getting beforehand with the rubric system. I thin one of the most important things that I learned was the way to lay out your story, from the reading of other fractured fairy tales to the final draft.

Noga`s Reflections

I think (actually I know) that I learned a lot of amazing things about our unit on fractured fairy tales this term. With Mr.Gelmon all of our grade learned how to write leads and conclusions. We also learned about dialogue, conventions and sensory language. I also learned about how to write our classmates good comments. Not the kind that sounds like you did not even read the story but the kind that you mean it, and you have a feeling inside that you did a great job on it.

This term i have learned how to use some new writing skills. Like, I never knew how to use dialogue, when to use dialogue and the rules of dialogue. I also learned how important it is to use sensory language. I think this fairy tale i wrote was the best thing I have ever written in my life because of all the writing skills I learned. This is what i learned in second term.

-Oren

zenen's reflections

My reflections of this years fractured fairy tale unit. this years fairy tale unit was VERY helpful for learning pretty much all of the writing skills you need to write a proper story. I found that my final draft of my fractured fairytale was one of the best pieces of writing i have ever done. this is because of the huge amount of time we spent planning are fairy tales so in a sense we almost knew what we were going to write before we wrote it. I think that i exelled most in dialogue out of all the parts of writing a story. i think that this was a great project and to Mr. G you should definetly do this with all the other grade sixers to come,

Zenen

Leor's Reflections On Our Writing Unit

As our writing unit started I was thinking to myself "We all know how to write stories, It's not that hard", But as we continued I realized "There is allot to learn about writing that I didn't know before". I learned how to write effective leads that grabs the reader, I learned how to proofread my writing with proper punctuation marks, I learned how to use Sensory Language properly in a sentence, I learned the rules of Dialogue. I learned how to organize my story so that it will have a clear beginning, middle, and end and most importantly I learned how to make an effective conclusion to leave the reader wanting more. We also read stories that had mistakes in all these 6 categories so that we will know what not do to. After our writing unit I definitely feel that I am a writing expert!

Yaakov's Reflections

I learned a lot from the process of making our Fractured Fairy Tales. I learned how to write dialogue correctly, and how to give comments that are important and that really help the writer. Comments that don't just say "Your story was good." or "I really enjoyed the story." I learned that comments aren't only supposed to be compliments. They are supposed to be helpful and they should tell the writer what he needs to fix and what should stay the way it is. I thought that in the end, the process was really worth it.

-Yaakov ;)

Salome's Reflections

I have learned a lot from my fractured fairy tale. I have learned how important it is to have a captivating lead and that we should remember not to make our conclusions random or unclear. I have also learned how to properly use dialogue. During these past few weeks we have done Peer Editing which was quite helpful. Our final drafts reflected on our deep and thoughtful hard work. Salome

Reflections

I have learned a lot from fractured fairy tales. from sentence structure, to leads and endings, proper dialogue to sensory language. those are just a few things that I have learned. not only are they interesting to learn about but they are important things to know in order to write an effective and interesting story.

Gabi

Maayan's Reflections

This term I learned that writing a story cant be perfect on the first draft and that you have make a couple drafts before you can have your final draft. I learned how to make an effective lead and conclusion and not to leave the reader hanging at the end of your story. I learned that using sensory language can really grab the reader into the story. I learned how to write dialogue with proper conventions and I also learned how to do peer editing. I really enjoyed learning how to construct a proper story this term.

- Maayan Fadida

Adi's Reflections

There are a lot of things that I learned while writing my twisted fairytale. I learned how to use proper grammar and use proper dialogue. I learned how to have a good lead, title and a good conclusion. I learned how to organize my story and how to make it clear for others. i learned how to proofread better other people's work and mine. I learned how to comment effectively on people's work. I learned how sensory language can make your story more dramatic and better. I learned how to change my word choice to make my story more interesting.

-Adi

refletion

I learnt how to correct other people's work as well as mine. I also learnt how to check spelling/grammer. I learnt how to write a good story using the rubric. over all I thought this was a great project!

Jamie's Reflections!

What I learned by writing the twisted fairytales was how to use the six traits of writing effectively and efficiently.
I learned how to write a lead effectively because now I can write a lead that grabs a reader and makes people want to read my story. I learned how to use conventions effectively because now I can make proper sentences that actually make sense and don’t make the reader stop and have to figure out how to read it. I learned how to use dialogue effectively because I can now write dialogue and make it interesting and use all of the rules of dialogue. I learned how to use sensory language because now I can write a story that is interesting and captivating by using interesting and captivating words such as “She ran as fast as she could, panting and sweating, she stumbled upon a protruding root.” I learned how to organize my story and be smoother than before, also for it to make more sense to the reader. I learned how to write and effective conclusion and close the story with a “BANG!” instead of a “slosh…”

Hana's reflections!

In term two I learned a lot of new skills about writing. I learned that you shouldn't jump to the first draft before knowing all the ideas and details that are going in to your story. One way that I learned how to do this, was by reading essays or narratives (etc.) that had the same idea as my topic, then map out my story. I have also learned how to use proper dialogue skills, sensory language, leads and conclusions. When I look back to how I wrote last year and then read my fractured fairy tale, I think WOW! Iv'e improved.

-Hana

Joelle's Reflections

This term I learnt a lot about constructing a short story. I learnt how to make an effective lead and conclusion, for example to grab the reader, and not to be random with the ending. I learnt how to use strong sensory language, clear dialogue, and how to peer edit. I learnt that it's not easy to have a perfect story, that it takes time, effort, and more than just one draft. When I look at my first draft, then my final draft, I see many changes that and I see how much it has improved. I really understand how to use the basics of writing now.

Chloe's Reflections

In term two I have learned a lot about writting. From reading other people's stories to writting our own. I learned how to write proper leads, conclusions, and dialogue. I have also learned how to use dialogue, how to place it, if it needs to be capitilized, if it should be indented ect. I would like to thank the editors who helped me write my 2nd and final draft. I can look back and see all my emprovment.

Isobel's Reflections

In term two I learned a lot about writing. From reading other stories similar to your idea, to finishing my final draft. I learned that writing is not easy, it takes time and effort. Good sensory language, dialogue, leads, conclusions are what make a story effective. I learned with Mr. Gelmon how to use all those skills properly. Also I look back and can see how different my first draft is to my final draft, thanks to my peer editors!

-Isobel

Jacob's Reflections

I learned about what makes a lead a good lead and also what makes a lead a bad lead - a good lead has to catch the writers attention and make them want more. A bad lead is boring and leaves the reader wanting to read another book.
I also learned about dialogue and how to use it properly in a sentence.
Learning about conclusions was interesting - I learned that a good conclusion is something that is very satisfying to the reader. A bad conclusion, is something random, like "And then I woke up" or something boring like "And then I died".

Learning how to make a good story is a very long process, but I think that in the end, the end result was definitely worth it.

My Reflections

Reflections

By Gil Ashkenazy 6B

Effective leads draw the reader into the story. The beginning of a story usually makes or breaks whether people will read it.

“I learned a lot of skills about writing dialogue,” expressed Gil. “It’s easier than I thought it would be.”

Did you know that a paragraph is not just a random collection of sentences? It is actually a group of sentences that relate to the same idea. A paragraph is like a container that contains one idea. It usually has a topic sentence and a conclusion. Five to seven sentences make up an ideal paragraph. I learned the value of sensory images. For example, I could see the pale blue sky, smell the fresh aroma of cinnamon buns, feel the mud between my toes and I could hear the birds chirping while I was writing my story. Learning about fairy tale breakdown is an important part of learning to write fairy tales. Writing fractured fairy tales is an interesting process.