My book talk is on, CHERUB Class A

In this book James is going on what could be his most dangerous mission ever, he has to shut down one of the worlds biggest cocaine dealers. To do that James must befriend his son Keith Jr.. Along the way he makes new friends and gets into some relationships. James' sister Lauren has been recruited to CHERUB and now James and Lauren can see each other. Lauren visits James for a few days on his birthday, after that things start to go out of hand, Nicole gets caught sniffing cocaine and starts to get sick she is rushed of to hospital and is immediately kicked out of CHERUB. Everyone has to get a urine test when james is caught with a metal straw with cocaine traces on it, the urine samples show that Kyle had been smoking marijuana.

I recommend this to anyone, boys or girls ages 11-15, who enjoy a suspenseful,humorous, action.

By:Gabe A. 6a

What did I learn from my fractured fairy tale?

I learned the structure of a story and that you have to make sure not just you understand your writing but so does the reader. I also learned the punctuation marks and how important they are. One of the toughest things for me is you have to be patient and rewrite many times. Everything I learnt really helped me create my story now and it will help me create many more in the long run.

Maayan's Book talk

Book talk #1

Name: Maayan Fadida

Book: Keeping the Moon

Author: Sarah Dessen

Hook:
Imagine being a girl that never, ever fits in. First it was because she was fat, then it was because of a bad reputation. Then when her Mom is going to be traveling the world for her new career, She’s being forced to go and stay with her weird aunt for the entire summer. What will happen to Colie? Will this be a good adventure or not?

Description:
This book is about a girl named Colie who doesn’t fit in. This summer Colie is being sent to her weird aunt in Colby, North Carolina for the summer because her mother traveling the world for her new career. When she arrives in Colby she gets herself a job at the Last Chance Bar and Grill. There she makes two best friends Morgan and Isabel. They change her into a new girl they unleash the beauty that was hiding inside Colie. Together they have their ups and downs but they were always there for each other. By the end of this adventure she finds out how strong friendship can be and out who she really is inside.

Recommendation: I would recommend this book to girls from the ages 11- 16 who like fiction. This book has some bad words.

You can find this book in our class library

The Lightening Thief book talk By Josha

Book Talk #1 By Josha

My book is The Lightening Thief by Rick Riordan

Short description…

Percy Jackson thinks of himself as just a normal troubled kid that gets kicked out of every boarding school he has ever been to. When he finds out that he is actually a half-blood (half God half human) things go from bad to worse. He finds out that Zeus’s master bolt has been stolen and he is the prime suspect! Join him and his half-blood friends as they travel to the underworld and back encountering horrible monsters along the way.

The Hook…

Imagine stepping into a world where monsters roam and Gods rule. Now imagine that you’re just a normal ‘troubled’ kid and you find out that you’re actually a part of this world –you’re a half-blood!
(Half God half human.) Moreover, you’re being held responsible for taking Zeus’s master bolt!
Percy Jackson is that kid. Journey with him and his friends as they go deep into the underworld and back to try to clear Percy Jackson’s name!

Recommendations…

I’d recommend this book to kids ages 9-13 and to people who like exhilarating adventure.

Where to find it…

The Lightening Thief is available in the VTT library, The Vancouver Public library, Kidsbooks, Chapters, and Book Warehouse.

Homework

Binder check (Monday)

Amazing Race continues on Tuesday!

What I learned

What I learned this writing term of twisted fairies was how to use prper Dialogue, proper Sensory language and proper grammer. I also learned how to mark other people's stories by using the PQP sheet. I had an great and fun expariment with this writing term!!

Rina

Book talk

Book talk
Otherwise known as Sheila the great
By: Neeve Mathews 6B
Have you ever felt like were bossed around by your sister or brother? Well that’s how Sheila felt when she went on a trip with her annoying sister Libby. My book is called “Otherwise known as Sheila the great”. This book is about a girl named Sheila who believes in cooties, who is afraid of dogs and terrified of spiders. Sheila has to go on a trip with her bossy sister Libby , she is not the kind of sister you would want to have. Can you imagine going on a vacation being bossed around being laughed at well that’s all the misery that Sheila had to go through. Even her parents were incredibly bossy they made Sheila go to swimming classes during the vacation. Sheila has always imagined on being a writer, so she attempts to start a camp newspaper. Sheila does not have a good vacation.



I’d recommend this book to grade 4 and up
This book is available in chapters, the school library, and the Vancouver public library.

Homework

Pg. 90 Communicating Skills (Thursday)

Fairy Tale Unit Reflection

I learnt so much in this unit!!! I really liked learning about dialogue. I learnt how to write a proper paragrph. I think that that what i learnt over this period will help me for life. I think that by learning how to write it made all my work easier.

Seth's Reflections

I learned a lot from this writing process. I learned how to use proper dialogue and I also learned a lot about sensory language, how to use it and when. I learned about leads not only for the fractured fairy take but how to make effective leads and what not to do to make it an ineffective lead. I also learned about helping other people with their stories with effective feedback. We learned about conclusions to stories, how to make a satisfying ending for the reader and not to disappoint the reader. We also learned about how to organize a story and to make sure that it is in order so that it is clear to the reader.

Reflections

I learned that writing a story (fairytale) doesn't take just one draft and then your done , it takes time.
I learnedhow to use more sensory
language more,and dialogue. When we first started, I thought it was pretty easy, but as we continued into all our drafts there was much I didn't know. I didn't know that much about
usingsensory language in a way to grab the reader in my story, and I didn't know about how to properly write a good feedback comment.
I also found that the comments people gave back to me helped a lot, too. They gave me ideas of what to add, what to take out, and what was good or bad.
The rubric our whole class put together was also very helpful!

Josha's Reflections

Since we have started this whole fairy tale business I have learned a great many new things. For example, I have learned how to use proper dialogue (Before we learned about dialogue, I never used to pay attention to it), sensory language, grammar, and proof reading. I found out for myself that doing lots of different drafts really helps improve on your writing. I was very surprised when I saw my 1st draft and then I saw my final draft. I couldn't believe the improvement!

-Josha Rafael

Eleane's reflections on her fractured fairy tale

I learned many things from our fractured fairy tales for example:

How to proofread, how to make a distinct beginning, middle and end, proper dialogue, exceptional sensory language, and that you need to make many drafts to even get close to making a significant story!

Thank you Mr. Gelmon for your help through this amazing journey through my 1st 2nd and 3rd draft and hope you can take me on many more adventures through writing!

Looking forward to the rest of the year with you!

Sincerely,

Eleane

What I learned during our fractured fairy tale unit

I learned from my fractured fairy tales unit a lot of thing like how to write stories all over again, proper use of dialogue, using a tone of sensory language, how distinctive the begging, middle and end are and how there are so many different levels of writing you have to do before the finale draft. One of the main things i learned is that a paragraph doesn't have to be 5-7 sentences a paragraph is on one idea and is can be three sentences or twelve sentences. I also learned how to how to proofread. I enjoyed this unit!

-Shayla

Reflections By Izzy

I have learned a lot from all the writing we did leading up to our fractured fairy tales. For example, I learned about proper dialogue, how to use sensory language, how to plan out my stories and how to proofread. I also learned that it takes quite a few drafts to get a story right. The first one is just the start and it helps to have people read your story and give you feedback so you can fix things you didn't notice.

Dani's Reflections

I learned many things form the fractured fairy tales unit. One of the most important skills I learned was dialogue. I found that dialogue is very important in ones story because it can show the personality, depth, and being of your character. I learned the actual rules for dialogue, along with how to use it properly. I learned how to mark others on there work while being helpful to not only them but to myself. I learned how to tell what grade I would be getting beforehand with the rubric system. I thin one of the most important things that I learned was the way to lay out your story, from the reading of other fractured fairy tales to the final draft.

Noga`s Reflections

I think (actually I know) that I learned a lot of amazing things about our unit on fractured fairy tales this term. With Mr.Gelmon all of our grade learned how to write leads and conclusions. We also learned about dialogue, conventions and sensory language. I also learned about how to write our classmates good comments. Not the kind that sounds like you did not even read the story but the kind that you mean it, and you have a feeling inside that you did a great job on it.

This term i have learned how to use some new writing skills. Like, I never knew how to use dialogue, when to use dialogue and the rules of dialogue. I also learned how important it is to use sensory language. I think this fairy tale i wrote was the best thing I have ever written in my life because of all the writing skills I learned. This is what i learned in second term.

-Oren

zenen's reflections

My reflections of this years fractured fairy tale unit. this years fairy tale unit was VERY helpful for learning pretty much all of the writing skills you need to write a proper story. I found that my final draft of my fractured fairytale was one of the best pieces of writing i have ever done. this is because of the huge amount of time we spent planning are fairy tales so in a sense we almost knew what we were going to write before we wrote it. I think that i exelled most in dialogue out of all the parts of writing a story. i think that this was a great project and to Mr. G you should definetly do this with all the other grade sixers to come,

Zenen

Leor's Reflections On Our Writing Unit

As our writing unit started I was thinking to myself "We all know how to write stories, It's not that hard", But as we continued I realized "There is allot to learn about writing that I didn't know before". I learned how to write effective leads that grabs the reader, I learned how to proofread my writing with proper punctuation marks, I learned how to use Sensory Language properly in a sentence, I learned the rules of Dialogue. I learned how to organize my story so that it will have a clear beginning, middle, and end and most importantly I learned how to make an effective conclusion to leave the reader wanting more. We also read stories that had mistakes in all these 6 categories so that we will know what not do to. After our writing unit I definitely feel that I am a writing expert!

Yaakov's Reflections

I learned a lot from the process of making our Fractured Fairy Tales. I learned how to write dialogue correctly, and how to give comments that are important and that really help the writer. Comments that don't just say "Your story was good." or "I really enjoyed the story." I learned that comments aren't only supposed to be compliments. They are supposed to be helpful and they should tell the writer what he needs to fix and what should stay the way it is. I thought that in the end, the process was really worth it.

-Yaakov ;)

Salome's Reflections

I have learned a lot from my fractured fairy tale. I have learned how important it is to have a captivating lead and that we should remember not to make our conclusions random or unclear. I have also learned how to properly use dialogue. During these past few weeks we have done Peer Editing which was quite helpful. Our final drafts reflected on our deep and thoughtful hard work. Salome

Reflections

I have learned a lot from fractured fairy tales. from sentence structure, to leads and endings, proper dialogue to sensory language. those are just a few things that I have learned. not only are they interesting to learn about but they are important things to know in order to write an effective and interesting story.

Gabi

Maayan's Reflections

This term I learned that writing a story cant be perfect on the first draft and that you have make a couple drafts before you can have your final draft. I learned how to make an effective lead and conclusion and not to leave the reader hanging at the end of your story. I learned that using sensory language can really grab the reader into the story. I learned how to write dialogue with proper conventions and I also learned how to do peer editing. I really enjoyed learning how to construct a proper story this term.

- Maayan Fadida

Adi's Reflections

There are a lot of things that I learned while writing my twisted fairytale. I learned how to use proper grammar and use proper dialogue. I learned how to have a good lead, title and a good conclusion. I learned how to organize my story and how to make it clear for others. i learned how to proofread better other people's work and mine. I learned how to comment effectively on people's work. I learned how sensory language can make your story more dramatic and better. I learned how to change my word choice to make my story more interesting.

-Adi

refletion

I learnt how to correct other people's work as well as mine. I also learnt how to check spelling/grammer. I learnt how to write a good story using the rubric. over all I thought this was a great project!

Jamie's Reflections!

What I learned by writing the twisted fairytales was how to use the six traits of writing effectively and efficiently.
I learned how to write a lead effectively because now I can write a lead that grabs a reader and makes people want to read my story. I learned how to use conventions effectively because now I can make proper sentences that actually make sense and don’t make the reader stop and have to figure out how to read it. I learned how to use dialogue effectively because I can now write dialogue and make it interesting and use all of the rules of dialogue. I learned how to use sensory language because now I can write a story that is interesting and captivating by using interesting and captivating words such as “She ran as fast as she could, panting and sweating, she stumbled upon a protruding root.” I learned how to organize my story and be smoother than before, also for it to make more sense to the reader. I learned how to write and effective conclusion and close the story with a “BANG!” instead of a “slosh…”

Hana's reflections!

In term two I learned a lot of new skills about writing. I learned that you shouldn't jump to the first draft before knowing all the ideas and details that are going in to your story. One way that I learned how to do this, was by reading essays or narratives (etc.) that had the same idea as my topic, then map out my story. I have also learned how to use proper dialogue skills, sensory language, leads and conclusions. When I look back to how I wrote last year and then read my fractured fairy tale, I think WOW! Iv'e improved.

-Hana

Joelle's Reflections

This term I learnt a lot about constructing a short story. I learnt how to make an effective lead and conclusion, for example to grab the reader, and not to be random with the ending. I learnt how to use strong sensory language, clear dialogue, and how to peer edit. I learnt that it's not easy to have a perfect story, that it takes time, effort, and more than just one draft. When I look at my first draft, then my final draft, I see many changes that and I see how much it has improved. I really understand how to use the basics of writing now.

Chloe's Reflections

In term two I have learned a lot about writting. From reading other people's stories to writting our own. I learned how to write proper leads, conclusions, and dialogue. I have also learned how to use dialogue, how to place it, if it needs to be capitilized, if it should be indented ect. I would like to thank the editors who helped me write my 2nd and final draft. I can look back and see all my emprovment.

Isobel's Reflections

In term two I learned a lot about writing. From reading other stories similar to your idea, to finishing my final draft. I learned that writing is not easy, it takes time and effort. Good sensory language, dialogue, leads, conclusions are what make a story effective. I learned with Mr. Gelmon how to use all those skills properly. Also I look back and can see how different my first draft is to my final draft, thanks to my peer editors!

-Isobel

Jacob's Reflections

I learned about what makes a lead a good lead and also what makes a lead a bad lead - a good lead has to catch the writers attention and make them want more. A bad lead is boring and leaves the reader wanting to read another book.
I also learned about dialogue and how to use it properly in a sentence.
Learning about conclusions was interesting - I learned that a good conclusion is something that is very satisfying to the reader. A bad conclusion, is something random, like "And then I woke up" or something boring like "And then I died".

Learning how to make a good story is a very long process, but I think that in the end, the end result was definitely worth it.

My Reflections

Reflections

By Gil Ashkenazy 6B

Effective leads draw the reader into the story. The beginning of a story usually makes or breaks whether people will read it.

“I learned a lot of skills about writing dialogue,” expressed Gil. “It’s easier than I thought it would be.”

Did you know that a paragraph is not just a random collection of sentences? It is actually a group of sentences that relate to the same idea. A paragraph is like a container that contains one idea. It usually has a topic sentence and a conclusion. Five to seven sentences make up an ideal paragraph. I learned the value of sensory images. For example, I could see the pale blue sky, smell the fresh aroma of cinnamon buns, feel the mud between my toes and I could hear the birds chirping while I was writing my story. Learning about fairy tale breakdown is an important part of learning to write fairy tales. Writing fractured fairy tales is an interesting process.

Homework

Final Drafts of Fractured Fairly Tales due Monday. Please prepare your packages to hand in to me, and make sure that all of your previous drafts are included. Those of you who decided to enter the short story contest, please remember to put your envelope in the mail by Sunday night.

Shabbat Shalom

cherub

My book is called:
BRIGANDS M.C. by Robert Munchamore

Short description of book
This books main character is Dante Scott, his family were brutally killed by a biker gang called the Brigands M.C. When Dante gets to go on a mission to try to infiltrate them. Will his life before Cherub interfere with his mission’s intentions? Will Dante go too far? This book is truly amazing and it is written very well.


I’d recommend this book to
To people who have already read the rest of the series and to kids twelve to 16.


BRIGANDS M.C is available in Chapters, Kids books and other book stores.

Respectfully submitted by: Shane Rozen -Delman

Cherub

Title: The General Author: Robert Muchamore


Short description of the book

This book is about 10 Cherub agents who go to the world’s largest urban warfare training compound to strengthen America’s army. This book is very fast paced with lots of action. It takes you through the whole war between the 10 Cherub agents, the American army and more. Also this book has everything from romance to action.


I’d recommend this book to...

Boys and girls ages 11-15 who like to read about action and drama. It may also be of interest to stronger readers who have already read other books from this series.

The General is available in Mrs. Weintrub’s class room or at Chapters and Kidsbooks.

Submitted by: Shane Rozen-Delman on February 4th 2010

The King in the Window

Oliver Parker is an ordinary, uncomplicated and unsophisticated American boy living in the lovely city of Paris. On a gloomy and sinister January night, his life takes a sudden turn when he is crowned king of Epiphany Night. His casual and traditional celebration is interrupted when a ghostlike boy appears at his kitchen window. The boy hisses to him in a soft and gentle voice, informing him that it's crucial that he returns to his throne to rule over his loyal subjects and defeat their life-long enemy.

I recommend this book to anyone from the age of ten and up that likes fantasy with a touch of French history and who truly enjoys anything with an extraordinary twist. An incredible story filled with action and imagination.

You can find this book at public libraries and at Chapters. Salome

Homework

-2nd draft of Fracture Fairy Tale (Thursday)
-Final draft due Monday

Homework

1. Effective Feedback Worksheet
2. Prepare your package for writers' workshop

Both due Thursday

Little Blue Sue

Once upon of time there was a girl name Little Blue Sue. She was very blue and her name was originally Sue. She wanted to go on a journey a journey to her sister’s hut. Her sister’s name was Hana. But this wasn’t any ordinary journey because she had to go through a desert to get to her sister’s hut. She tried to picture an image of what would be in the desert. But she could not picture anything.

“ What if … no, not that!” said Little Blue Sue as she created a scary picture in her mind.

“I guess I could give Hana a call and ask what I would need on this journey.”

“ Ring, ring!”

“Hi this is your sister Little Blue Sue.”

“Is that really you Little Blue Sue? I have not seen you for ages!” Screamed Hana in to the phone.

“Yah I was just calling to ask you a question about the desert, since I am going to your hut.”

“What is it?”

“Well I know this is kind of embarrassing but what do you need in the desert.”

“You should bring what you think you will need. That’s my one piece of advice.”

By now Little Blue Sue had exactly one hour if she wanted to make it for lunch. But she was still deciding what she should bring. Dumb enough she brings nothing but her.

Now Little Blue Sue is on her journey. She can’t wait to arrive! She is getting exhausted and needs to take a brake of walking. So she takes a brake and sits right next to the palm tree. A few minutes later she resumes walking. “Boo!” Says a creepy animal from behind Little Blue Sue.

“Oh my G-D who are you.”

“ I am about to be your worse night mare.” Said the Carcass

The carcass takes her arm and strangles her. Now he begins to take her slowly to her sister’s hut. But little Blue Sue doesn’t know where he is taking her. Now Little Blue Sue is nervous her life is on the line. But she won’t say a word.

Now the Carcass had stopped walking and let go of Little Blue Sue. “We arrived.” said the Carcass “ and your life is about to get more miserable.”

Little Blue Sue sees a hut. She thinks its Hana’s hut. It is! Hana walks out and could tell that the carcass was giving Little Blue Sue a hard time. Now Hana jumps on the Carcass’s back and says

“You have three chances to get out of my hut and give us a little present because of your rude behavior.”

“ Now whose life is about to get more miserable”? Said Little Blue Sue.

Little Blue Sue and Hana now are chatting it up and thinking what his three chances should be.

“I got it.,” said Hana.

“What, what”

“So I will tell you each chance he gets as we go on let put it this way you will love what I’m about to do to him.”

The carcass knows that his three chances are goanna be very scary but he has a lot of fear. The first chance he gets is… He will ether give Little Blue Sue and Hana a present and get out of Hana’s hut or he will get a quarter of his body chopped off.

“We will be extra nice and let you decide what quarter of your body do you want chopped off.” Said Little Blue Sue and Hana.

“ I want no part of my body chopped off.”

“ I guess we can always do it the easy way and just chop your whole body into pieces.”

“Never mind then.”

The carcass finally decided after ten minutes that the quarter of his body that was getting chopped off was goanna be his head and his arms.

“Oh yah one more thing how would you like to be chopped up.”

“ I don’t care just get it over with.”

The end results were Little Blue Sue and Hana cut his arms and head with an axe but he still managed to keep living.

“ Looks like its time for us to give you another chance to get out and give us a present.”

“This time it’s going to be very harsh for two reasons. The first reason is you don’t chooses what parts of your body you want cut off we do. The second reason is your getting half your body chopped up.”

“What part should we chop up this time Hana?”

“I think we should chop off every thing waist and below.”

“ I agree. Also this time we should use a knife so it takes more time to chop up.”

Now all the carcass has is a stomach and hands. The carcass is now thinking should I go or should I stay.

“We are giving you one more chance.”

“What will happen if I stay”?

“You will see.”

“Ouch.” The carcass says.

Little Blue Sue and Hana end up killing the rest of him with their hands. So Little Blue Sue and Hana lived happily ever after and the carcass ended up having the miserable life. Because he ended up getting murdered. The End.

By Oren Balshin

The 12 dancing princes DRAFT 1!!!!!!

The 12 dancing princes
-By: Barbie
THIS MY FRIST DRAFT!!!!!


Once upon a time in faraway place lived a king and his 12 handsome sons. In a nearby land lived another king and his pretty daughters. Every night the princes went somewhere and danced their shoes to pieces with princesses, which troubled the king very much. No one new where the princes went. The 12 dancing princesses in the land nearby, danced with 12 princes, they also danced their shoes to pieces. Well obviously they danced with each other.

Both kings stated that if someone could find out where the princes and princesses went they could choose one for their husband or wife.

One dark day an old woman saw the miller daughter.
“Hello miss,” crackled the old woman.
“Hi, I better be on my way now,” the girl replied politely, for she was not supposed to talk to strangers.
“Where are you going?” asked the woman.
“To my father’s mill.”
“OH! Well, maybe you can go to the castle on your way. Once there you can try to figure out where the princes go,” the old woman said. Something in the old woman’s voice made the miller’s daughter feel uneasy.
“I would rather not,” said the girl in a strong voice.
“Please, not even for an old woman?” the woman pleaded.
“Okay, I will, just for you though.”
“Thank-you, very much!”
“Is there I need to know?” chattered the girl.
“Yes, the princes will give you wine, do not drink it, then this take this cloak and cover your whole body in it and follow them,” the old woman crackled.
“Thank you very much! Bye,” the girl said and then bid farewell.

That night the eldest prince came and gave the millers daughter wine. The girl because she did not believe the old woman drank the wine and fell asleep. While the girl was asleep the princes and the princesses danced together at the golden castle. They drank dainty drinks, and ate dainty food too.

The next day when the king asked the miller’s daughter where the princes go she said “I do not know because I was asleep.

“Off with her head!” the king commanded
“No! May I at least have one more chance?”
“No! You can’t! Take he to gallows guards, seize her.”
“Okay boss!”

They gallows were at the back of the castle. When prisoners were taken they first imprisoned in the foal smelling cells and after one week they were taken to the dark suffocating cement rooms at the back at were looked over by the executioners, lastly they were taken to willow tree that looked like a navy blue sheet from all the body cloths from the many people that had been hung previously.

After the hanging the eldest son says to his father “Dad, come by the bedroom at ten’ O clock, I have something to show you.
“Sure thing son,” the king replies eagerly because he really wanted to no where his sons went every night.

That night the king arrives at the prince’s door at exactly ten, and he walks in. As he walks in he catches a glimpse of a shiny peal white with a hint of pink diamond ring being put into the eldest prince’s pocket.

“Hey dad,” chirps the seventh prince, he is far the most happy.
“Hey mister!” the king replies.
“Let’s go now,” the eldest one said briskly.

Once down the secret stairwell the princes lead their father through a twisting and turning maze of passage ways that are full of cobwebs. Once through the passage what the king finds himself in a clearing with silver, peach, and cherry trees. The eldest prince then leads the king to an opal blue river, there he sees the king of the near by land.
“What is going on?” says the father of the princes
“I have no idea!” says the father of the princesses
“All I know is that I saw a diamond ring being shoved into my eldest son’s pocket.”
“Really! Maybe we’ll have a joint kingdom.”
“Maybe.”

“Dad come over here,” shouts the eldest son.
“What”
“I am about to propose. Emily you are the most beautiful girl in the whole world and I want to be with you forever. Will you commit to spending the rest of your life with me? Will you marry me?”
“Of course I will. I love you now and will always love u forever.”
“OH! Emily!”
The next day there is a wonderful gallant wedding in the clearing. The newly wedded husband and wife were wedded under the silver, cherry, and peach trees. They were in their best clothes a satin white dress that looked like clouds floating in the air for the girl and a king’s dress outfit for the man.
Now twenty years later they live in the golden castle and have 12 children just like their parents.

The end

Chloe 1st draft of fractured fairytale

Goldenlock and the 3 Hairs


Once upon a time there lived 2 little hairs. The 2 little hairs were as happy as could be. One day they had a baby hair. They played with it, kissed it, loved it, and made it food. They always used to brush it with its nice pink brush.
Mean while there lived lock next door named Goldenlock. She wanted to know everything. She would peek out of her window and stare at the baby wondering when it was born or if it was adopted.
About 3 years later…
“The shampoo should be ready in 1 hour,” said Medium hair.
“Park Park!” yelled Baby hair.
Medium hair finished mixing the shampoo and put it in the fridge to set.
So medium, big, and baby hair put on their beanie and there cardigan and opened the store cabinet and left.
“Look at this nice little house,” said Goldenlocks. “I think I will just take a little peek inside.” So Goldenlock opened the door and went in.
Goldenlock was a very “nosey” little thing. She opened the fridge and saw shampoo. She said “maybe I’ll just use a little,” opening up medium hairs shampoo. “This shampoo is too lumpy, and this shampoo is too small,” she said opening up Baby hair’s shampoo. “But this shampoo is just right,” so she goes in the shower and uses big hairs shampoo all up.
Goldenlock sees hats and thinks she would look great if she tried it on. So she tried Medium hairs hat on “This hat is too big,” she said. Goldenlock tries on big hairs hat “this hat is too lumpy.” So she tries on Baby hairs hat and it fits juuust right. But then she falls and it breaks. “Whatever they would never notice” Goldenlock announced.
Goldenlock is walking around the house acting like she lives there and she comes across some beautiful brushes. So she uses them she brushes herself with them.
Little did she know that big, medium and baby hair were coming back from there walk. And as they walk into the kitchen they see no shampoo left for big hair, a broken hat for baby hair, and they see the girl next door brushing herself with their hair brushes??
“This cannot be,” said big hair. But he knew it was.
Goldenlock turned around and saw them. She was so freaked out that right then and there she killed all three of them.
The End!!!

Jacob's Fractured Fairy Tale

Perspective of the Beast’s Father

Earth. Birthplace of the human race. My race was content on our planet, but someone wanted to rule the universe. He had made a machine that can still destroy entire planets. Me and my comrades had his forces stopped for the time being. Or so we thought. The enemy leader had slipped our lines, but we didn’t know this until we heard the distant hum of a machine. The machine that had destroyed many planets. We got there just in time. He was setting up his machine in space and he had not visited the planet. But once again, we were mistaken. A deeper secret has surfaced in the past centuries. Our worlds have met before.

Once upon a time, there was a princess who lived in a beautiful palace, but she was unhappy – she knew she would be queen, but she had to marry a man first. One day, she saw a handsome young man. When she returned to the palace, she told her father all about him. His father was suspicious and said he would have to go to meet him before he approved of him. The next morning, he and a company of his best guards set out to find the man, but there was just one problem; They didn’t know where to find him. They asked many people, but no one knew where to find him. At last, they found an old man who said:

“The man you seek lives on Smoke Mountain; The most dangerous mountain ever!”

All of the guards shivered in fear. Even the king looked worried, but he shook it off. He wanted his daughter to be happy.

Three days later, the princess still had not heard from her father. The queen was about to send out a search party in a few hours.

“He’s probably having a nice time and doesn’t want to leave,” She assured herself. Suddenly, she heard the beating of wings. A raven, black as night smoothly sailed by her room and dropped a scroll on her windowsill. With dread in her heart, she reached over and picked it up. Hands trembling, she picked it up - it said: If you value you and your father’s life, you WILL NOT send out a search party to look for the king. He is in custody and is fine…. For now. As for the guards, they are dead, slain by my pets, the horrible griffin. ONLY you can come and come as soon as possible. If you are not here in 3 days your father will DIE!

That night, after stopping the guards by telling that an army was advancing from the north, ready to attack, she set out by moonlight, taking nothing but a little food. She travelled, day and night to get there. She looked up at the black castle, after nights of traveling, and felt fear run through her.

Back at the palace, a angry mob was demanding to see the princess .All of the men wanted to marry her, but the queen said that the princess was in her room and not to be disturbed. Finally the queen was so fed up, she burst through the door - the princess was not there. On her bed there were two notes. She read the princesses first, then read the other one. The princess was gone.

After hearing the terrible news, every soldier and man who liked the princess set out for the castle. The man who rescued the princess supposedly would become king.

Back at the castle, the Beast had taken the princess hostage, however, he was not in his beast form. He was in the form of a young man. When he had came out to greet her, the princess had fallen into some kind of trance. Though everyone thought he was a cold blooded killer, it really wasn’t his fault – when he turned into his beast form, he just lost control. Once, he was walking by a village, when unexpectedly, he turned into a beast. Before he knew what was happening, he had laid waste to the village, killed the inhabitants and destroyed the buildings. That is why he had built a castle. He had made the walls thick, so when he turned into a beast, he couldn’t break through and kill more people. In many ways, it was his personal prison – his griffins brought him his food. Not 3 nights ago, he had killed 30 soldiers when they had attacked his castle. But now an army was coming to slay him, free the king and destroy his only hope of never becoming a beast again – he had to kiss the princess, but he was afraid that he would lose control and kill her, like so many before. Letting loose a horrible roar, he called all of his wolves, griffins and bears to his command. They would have to be quick if they were to prepare for an attack. Only if it was absolutely necessary would he fight. He had killed so many. On this planet and on his.

Perspective of the Beast

I was originally born on a planet, not in this solar system. Everyone was like me. Like a monster. Life was good, though and our race thrived. But there was a single beast who wanted to rule the world. A civil war broke out and I knew, that it would only be a matter of time before our race would perish. I fought, long and hard. I saw many of my comrades die. While most of our race stayed behind to fight an almost pointless war, a group of beasts and I left and scattered ourselves across the universe. All of our species were extremely skilled scientists, so I built myself a human body to disguise myself, but something went wrong in the process. A radioactive wave was released with enough power to destroy a planet. Luckily, I was in an underground chamber 30 000 feet beneath the earth, so I saved myself from getting killed, and the world from being destroyed. But I suffered the consequences. Now, I am like this and only a kiss can break the horrible truth I call a curse. I do not know for certain, but I have seen the signs, heard the howls at night. Yes , I think the enemy leader is searching for me across the universe. Now I know the truth. The civil war is over, but the wrong side won. I have seen the streaks in the sky that humans call a comet, but I know what they are. Those are shuttles, designed by my race. The humans are very much like our race. Capable of great violence. Now they are coming for me. My griffins, wolves and bears will not be enough to stop them. There are too many of them. I had hoped it would not come to this, but it is almost unavoidable. I will fight.

The queen looked on at the advancing troops with a new desperation – now her husband AND her daughter were missing. It would only be a day before they reached the castle. Almost there, she said to herself.

“Captain,” Said the queen “begin our attack!”

The Beast could hear them coming. With his intensified hearing, he could here the clang of the soldier’s iron armour against the hard ground. With a deafening roar he ordered his small force to attack. They surged forward with roars, snarls and piercing shrieks from the griffins. Within moments, he heard the surprised shouts of the soldiers and a roar of pain from a wolf. With a snarl, he changed himself into a man and ran into one of the castle turrets and surveyed the battle. Things were not going well for his forces.

The remaining soldiers surged forward after destroying all the animals that had attacked them. Now they pressed forward, determined to free the king and the princess. The creature that was holding the king and princess hostage had to be dealt with.

“We must kill the creature that has taken my husband and daughter hostage,” Said the queen “Kill it at all costs!”

Back at the castle, the princess had gotten free and then had freed her father from his cell. She had heard a faint rumbling in her cell, coming from a tower. She and her father ran up and saw the beast entering a large, oval shape. He looked into her eyes one last time and said:

“I can’t stay here. Don’t tell anyone of my presence here ever. You will never see me again. Take this.” He tossed a small, gold chain with words engraved on it. “Goodbye.”

With that he closed the door of the pod and blasted off into space.

“Noooooooo!” screamed the princess. She looked at the little gold chain in her hand. On it, it said the words, They are coming for you.

Suddenly, the princess woke up in her bed. Quietly, she tiptoed over to her parent’s room. Her father was still there. She breathed a sigh of relief. Just a dream, she told herself over and over again. As she climbed back into bed again, her hand touched a small, hard object. It looked like the gold chain from her dream. With trembling hands, she turned it over. On it were the same words that she didn’t understand. They are coming for you? What does that mean? She thought. As she lay there, confused, little did she know that she would never rise to see the next day again….