A musical note-first draft

Hey everybody!!! I wrote this poem today and its my first draft, if you guys can comment on it it would be great!!! Thanks alot. And Im going to change the end but I need comments to do it!


Already walking into the
music room I can
hear it

its music, I look
at the blackboard, I
see it

Music notes, I saw
the teacher, I
could hear

Her voice, I see
her fingers moving
on something

the piano, I see
her having a
good day

-Janine

final

This is my fourth draft and probaly last guys. So if you have any ideas of
what I need to improve I'm open for suggestions till next Wednesday.

Thanks,
Kalv

6 Million Scars

Into the heart
Between seas and fields
It’s hard to imagine what happened
Here


There are men blessed by heaven
With a story
Who sometimes are unable to distinguish
Many years of pain
With the Scars they carry

They lived
Despite
The Men with
Guns

A Dark Place

you're in this place
its a dark place
you look at all the other people all you see is black

I'm in this place
its a dark place
I look at all the other people all I see is black

But this time
its like time is going backwards
you look at all the other people all you see is black
its a dark place
that we are all in.


Melody

6B homework!

Lee: Do aquatic biomes and created creature for Dec. 10.

Rabbi Burger: Write a paragraph on "if someone came up to you and told to kill someone and he would give you the cure to cancer, what would you do?". Due Dec. 13.

Mr. G: "India" proofreading sheet. Due tomorrow.

Morah Mirit: Read chapter 4 on Samuel on internet and answer the 3 questions for tomorrow.

Homework 6A

Japan proofreading
BRING COMICS FOR FREAD