Where Im from Draft1

Please comment!!!!:) Its my first draft:]

I am from a sandy shore
Where I can swim alone
where there are no doors
and where you cant make a clone
It is a tropical place
Its also underwater
Where nothing can be erased
And you can swim with otters.

Note:Im not done But I need comments!!!

Mr G,

how was your 2nd day in Israel? I hope it was fantastic!