Dog in bed Aliteration

Hi guys,
I one example of alliteration in Dog in bed

-Slim Space

Aviva

Fix this "bad" paragraph...

Let's see if any of you can fix this paragraph using what we learned in our lesson on "bad" words.


My four cousins visited us from out of town last weekend. We had an amazing time together! It was really nice to have them here because I haven't seen them for a while. We went to a really big water park on Saturday, and went down the really fast slides. We had a really good barbecue for lunch and I ate five hot dogs. I was so full! I didn't care though, and I barely even waited five minutes before running really fast back to the pool. By the end of the day we were all so tired that the five of us slept very deeply all the way home.

Way to go, Marc L., Micah and Aviva!

Thanks to you three for starting us off on the right foot for this poem analysis. You've not only found some interesting elements in the poem, but you've also expressed yourselves very well. Way to go!

-Mr. G.

What was once, and never became

Hey guys,

I'm writing a poem about a horse describing his life as a horse. But I only have the first stanza, and I need help to make the second one. Please comment and leave suggestions.

When I was free,

I used to run like the wind.

Galloping through the tall green grass.

Letting the wind go through my tail,

And rustle between the hairs of my

Mane.

Simile From Dog in bed

Hi Guys,
I found a simile in Dog in Bed. When she says "Why should your black silky ears feel like happiness" it is obvious that a dogs ear can not feel like happiness. This is a great way to express her feelings on how she feel about her dog and how it feels like.
It is a great simile because within it you can see a sensory image by saying its black silk ears feel... it almost seems like you can feel the silky ear of your dog or any other pet you have.

Hope that helps!

Aviva

Sensory images

Hi everybody:
If you need some sensory images, here they are

• You shift, groan, drape your chin on my lap
• Nose tucked under tail
• Why should your black silk ears fell like happiness
• All night i orbit, tangle-limbed
• O, that langiud, movie star drape!

Micah

"Dog in Bed" Metaphor

Hey All,

I found an interesting metaphor in "Dog in Bed". "You are my warm, furred planet centered in my bed." Obviously a dog is not a planet, but maybe in this line Joyce Sidman is referring to the dog as a planet in the solar system of the bed. Planets are very big and powerful things and maybe this calling a dog a planet was expressing strong feelings for the dog that the owner had. Dogs are on other planets than us while still being there for warmth.

Hope you can relate,

Marc L.