Being with my friends!
Fabulous sun!
Freezing cold!
Wet right through!
Having fun and falling down!
Laughing so hard!
Screaming!
Speeding downhill!
Crashing at the bottom!
Drinking hot chocolate!
Relaxing bus ride back!
Oh yah......skiing!
Fabulous sun!
Freezing cold!
Wet right through!
Having fun and falling down!
Laughing so hard!
Screaming!
Speeding downhill!
Crashing at the bottom!
Drinking hot chocolate!
Relaxing bus ride back!
Oh yah......skiing!
Cypress Mountain.
9 comments:
Good job! I enjoyed it. My favourite part was the last stanza because you gave us hint of what you were writing about.
Great Poem Tomer!!!
I really liked how you kept it a secret untill the last line about cypress mountain!!
-Aviva
Great ending and a very good tribute to an awesome day in the snow!
In my opinion the short lines and fast cadence really made some of the lines more powerful.
Great job Tomer!!
-Benny
good job, it describe the trip perfectly. But I wouldnt put an exclamation mark on every single line...(for some lines its good)
nini
Tom Tom,
Great poem. The title didn't give what the poem was about away, and that's good, because I didn't know what it was about until the end.
Your skiing buddy,
Bram
Great job Tomer I could see you in this poem
good job Tomer!
I really liked that poem!
it had a lot of good sensory images like"hot chocolate with my friends"
good job Tomer.
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