you're in this place
its a dark place
you look at all the other people all you see is black
I'm in this place
its a dark place
I look at all the other people all I see is black
But this time
its like time is going backwards
you look at all the other people all you see is black
its a dark place
that we are all in.
Melody
Wednesday, December 5, 2007
A Dark Place
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Interesting, Mel. Are you expressing that, at times, everyone feels lonely, but in fact we're all in this together?
I'm having some trouble understanding the line, "It's like time going backwards."
Can you clarify?
-Mr. G.
in the begining of the poem i wrote that you are in this place and its dark you look at the people...
then in the last stanza its all backwards. you see the people then its dark and then we are in this place. does that make sense?
melody
Interesting poem Melody. It was very well written. I am just kind of confused of what you mean in the last stanza. But great work!!
Aviva
Interesting poem Melody. It was very well written. I am just kind of confused of what you mean in the last stanza. But great work!!
Aviva
mel
that was sooo deap.i would have never thought that you could have writen such amazing work.
your poem was very well writtten
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