Hi everyone this is my thank you poem for my mom. It isn't excactly a "thank you" poem it's more like something that is important to me. Please comment!
Sliding Down the Slides
When I was
1 and a ½
years old
you used to take me to the playground
I
of course
don’t remember these
memories
but from you telling me
I can even
picture
the stuff that we did there
at the playground
in my head
we had so much fun
together
you chasing me
me running away
and laughing
sliding down slides
me
first afraid
but after getting used to them
sliding down all the time
with a smile on my face
in the sandbox
according to me
I “wasn’t allowed” to
get dirty
and if I would
get dirty
I would get out and rub off
every single grain of sand or dirt
that was on my foot
sometimes
I remember
all of these things
that we did
at the park
they always put a smile on my face
just wanted to tell you
that when these things come to my head
I remember
that you were there
at the park
with me
every time
Tuesday, December 18, 2007
Thank You poem - Sliding down the Slides
Posted by Shak-Shak at 7:23 PM
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2 comments:
Shak-shak
I thought you did an amazing job on you poem1 you made it really personal and that is what our poems should be like. I thought that your spacing is kinda off because some important parts are at the end of a stanza when they should be a one-lined stanza.
Overyall i thought you did an fantastic job on you first draft and i can't wait for your final draft!
Fanny
good job!
i thought you had alot of great sensory images, and overall you did amazing!-adi-
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