hey guys here is a new poem I wrote.
The apple crook
An apple a day ,
Goes missing away .
But a leaf from the tree,
Shall grow apon thee.
Then the night that I came,
It was such a shame.
With one apple to spare,
you grabbed it
like you just didn’t care
and I asked you why ,
but there was no reply.
for the apple he took ,
Defined him as a crook.
p.s. I am not finished
-mikaela
Sunday, February 24, 2008
the apple crook
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5 comments:
Hey Mikaela,
I really liked the idea of this poem because it was so original.
How did you think of it?
Isabelle
Hey Mikaela,
I thought this was a great poem because the rhyming flowed very well and it was original.
How did you think of the idea?
-Isabelle
Wicked poem Mikaela! Very well written with interesting words! The rhyme scheme was awesome, because it did not make the poem cheesy at all!
Great Work!
Marc L.
GREAT JOB MIKEALA!! Nice rhymes. Just one thing in the 9th line maybe you should just write "like you didnt care" instead of adding the just. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!
Mikaela that was a really good poem!
It was a very interesting poem! It was very detailed and I saw a lot of sensory images1
I also really liked the rhyme scheme.
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