Let's see if any of you can fix this paragraph using what we learned in our lesson on "bad" words.
My four cousins visited us from out of town last weekend. We had an amazing time together! It was really nice to have them here because I haven't seen them for a while. We went to a really big water park on Saturday, and went down the really fast slides. We had a really good barbecue for lunch and I ate five hot dogs. I was so full! I didn't care though, and I barely even waited five minutes before running really fast back to the pool. By the end of the day we were all so tired that the five of us slept very deeply all the way home.
Saturday, February 2, 2008
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Amy, Marc, Jacob and Aviva visited my family from Seattle last weekend. We shared laughs, played board games and caught up with each other! It was fantastic to have them here in Vancouver because I haven't seen them for three months. We packed a picnic and went to Splash Down Park on Saturday, and went down The Slide of Death. We had our tasty picnic for lunch and I ate five hot dogs. I was bloated! I couldn't stand waiting around on the deck and before I knew it I was sprinting back to the pool. By the end of the day we were all ready to plop onto our beds, but decided sleeping very deeply all the way home was okay too.
There you go Mr. G.,
Marc L.
Jacob, Aleesha, Donny (not Danny), and Yolinda from Chicago, met up with my immediate relatives last 7 24 hour periods. We expressed chuckles, played Zathura, and caught up with our long time no see type of friends.
It was joyful to have them here in Vancouver, B.C., because we hadn't viewed them for 93 days straight. We created a picnic basket that your taste buds would scream for, and headed to Big Kahuna water park in Florida on the day of rest. I went down the Spider Spiral, it was race car fast. We devoured our out of this world picnic basket in 1.56 minutes, a family best. I was as big as a sumo wrestler because I inhaled so much food. I knew I should have waited an hour after eating, but I couldn't hold it in. I moved my legs as fast as I could climbed up the high dive stairs, and hurled myself off the edge. I did a double front flip into the pool. The water was as cold as dry ice. By the end of the 24 hour period we were ready to doze off on our beds, but decided sleeping all the 45 hour ride home would be an okay decision too.
Here you are Mr. G, hope you like it.
-Bram S.
Jonah, James, and Kyra visited us from Calgary last weekend. We played Wii, computer games and went bowling at The Zone! It was amazing to have them in Florida after there parents split up they moved to Calgary with there mom. We went to Blizzard on Saturday, and went down the river rafting ride and moved at the speed of light. We had a excellent barbecue for lunch and I ate five hot dogs with tons of ketchup. I was so full that I could barley move! But I didn't care though, and I barely even waited five minutes before running really fast to the pool and doing a cannonball. By the end of the day we were all so tired that we fell asleep while walking to the bed.
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