You don't like it
when you can have it
But you want it
when it's gone
You don't care for it
when it's alone
Once someone goes to it
you stare in envy
It's not important
when noone cares
Once someone takes interest
it's all you can think about
She doesn't mean
a thing to you
But once one of your
friends takes a liking for her
All of a sudden you realize
she is beautiful
Marc L.
P.S. Please comment
Friday, February 22, 2008
Karma
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8 comments:
A wonderful idea that you've expressed very nicely here, Marc.
Great Job Marc! !!
Very well written!!
I loved the topic and you explained it in an excellent way!
Way to go!
-Aviva
Thanks to everyone who commented on the last two drafts of my poem. It really means alot to me! :)
Marc L.
WAY BETTER ENDING MARC!! you made it flow and it was very powerful and i could really understand what you were trying to say.
GREAT JOB!
ps: i dont quite understand wich part is the karma. Is it because he let her go and then he wants her back but he cant have her?
I have no idea, I couldn't really think of what to call it and I don't know how to explain it so I guess I guessed for the title. Maybe you can help me figure one out! Thanks!
Marc L.
I actually think you should stick with karma. It makes scence(sorry my spelling for scence is wrong i think) to me but you can change it if you want.
marc I really like the ending and I think you should stick with "karma" as you title.it was very well writen.
great job!
-mikaela
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