Sunday, May 4, 2008

music poem draft 1

I guys tell me how you like this poem. PLEASE! If anyone can give me ideas for a good title and some way to end the last stanza but still to keep it rhyming.

music through my ear
what else can I hear
with the bark
of linkin park
as I use the beat
of my feet
to dance along
to this awesome song
as I dance along
to this awesome song
I pass bye
and catch some eyes
as my ears are blasting
to this song that is ever lasting
I listen to the final words
and look outside at the birds
as the birds tweet away
to the beat that plays
the song ends

3 comments:

Adam Gelmon said...

Marc,

Good cadence here--except that last line.

Kalv said...

i know

sharon said...

Marc

that was a really good rhyming poem with lots of scensory images. I liked how the poem was rhyming except for the last line.

~ Good Job ~