Hi everyone,
I started writing a poem but I am stuck and I don't know what to write next.
Here it is:
Playing in the sand
making an island
out of shovels and pails
watching the fish’ scales
Looking at the sea
not so far away from me
the waves
crashing against the
seashore
From,
Shak
P.S. Please comment
5 comments:
That is all you need. It is good like that!
Love it!
Marc L.
Thats really good! If I were writing that I would maybe write it as a hole days point of view or how the sand feels nice. I think you should also say where this beach is because if you say someplace in mexico, I think it will be easier to relate to because mexico is probably something like what you are going to explain about. I think its really good...and maybe you should make visible rhyme scheme that someone can recognize throug out the whole poem.
I love it!
Nini
Great poem Shak!!
sensory images all the way through!
Thank you all for the comments. They really helped.
-Shakaed
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