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I had my twelvth birth day yesterday. It was soooo fun! All of my friend's came over and we ate some really good food in the backyard. My friend Ross was really late so I ate his food. Ross was kina mad when he got to the party 'cause I ate his pizza, so I had to give him some of my ice cream to make up for it. But I got some really good revenge because Ross ate his ice cream so fast that he totally go bad brain freeze. I felt a little bad for Rosses headache but, he probably deserved it. Maybee next time Ill tell you about what happen when we opened my presents.
Wednesday, February 13, 2008
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Yesterday was the best day ever, it was my 12th birthday. Finally one year before I am a teen! almost every one I knew came over. We had so much fun playing games and eating pizza, though a good friend of mine named Ross came late so i ate his pizza because I thought he wasn’t coming. Later Ross demanded to have all of my pizza and pop. Soon after, I got my revenge because we put him on the tire swing and spun him around as fast as we could. He felt pretty sick afterward but he deserved every little bit of it. Next time I’ll tell you about what when we opened presents, if Ross doesn't find me.
I had my eleventh birthday yesterday. I had a blast! All of my good friend's came over and we had pizza on the trampoline. Amanda, my friend,
was late...and her pizza was getting cold, so I ate it. When Amanda got there she looked furious(even though she was trying to hide it) because I ate her pizza. So I had to give her some of my favorite ice cream, chocolate chip cookie dough, to make up for it. But I got some things to go my way...Amanda ate her, well my,
ice cream so fast she got a brain freeze. A few minutes later I felt bad for Amanda, but I think she deserved it. Maybe I'll tell you next time when I opened her present. When I opened it, nothing was in there...
Nini :)
Here you go Mr. G,
Yesterday was my awesome, exciting, and fun, 12th b-day. Only 1 more year until my Bar Mitzvah. All my buddies came over to my house for tackle football and ribs drenched in barbecue sauce. My dream combination. Plus cream soda on the side. I went a little overboard on the ribs. As soon as I finished my ribs I went to Dad to see if he was making any more ribs. He said no. I casually looked over at Ross' plate, he had 3 ribs sitting on his plate. He was in the bathroom, and it didn't look like he was going to eat them. So I devoured his ribs to.
"Yum," I said as I licked my fingers clean. When Ross came back from the bathroom, he saw his empty plate. He had screamed at me to go buy more ribs, and make them on the barbecue. 1 hour later Ross' was finally pleased. I wont tell you a lot about present time, all though I'll tell you this: it involved blood, knives, a football, and and an angry weasel.
-Bram S.
I finally had my batmitzvah party. I've been waiting for ages. After all the dancing I was exhausted. My good friend Ross came a little late so I got two servings of food!
Later Ross said that since I ate his food he thought he had a right to drink my pop! But I got my revenge, by locking him in a room. After half an hour I felt bad so I unlocked the door and let him out. He got really mad, after that he gave me the silent treatment, but he stopped when it was time for presents. Maybe later I will tell you about the presents, If my Parents stop talking.
I had my twelfth birthday yesterday and my party was screaming. All of my friends came over and we ate some fantastic cuisine in the backyard. My friend Ross was really late so I ate his filet topped with gold leaf. He was hungry and mad so I gave him some of my gourmet sorbet to make up for it. However later I got my revenge because when we all sat down to watch the "Adam and Eli Show" season premier I gave him the folding chair and as I expected it collapsed. Ross deserved it but I felt bad. Stay tuned because next time I will tell you about what happened when I opened my presents.
Eli
I had my twelfth birthday yesterday and my party was screaming. All of my friends came over and we ate some fantastic cuisine in the backyard. My friend Ross was really late so I ate his filet topped with gold leaf. He was hungry and mad so I gave him some of my gourmet sorbet to make up for it. However later I got my revenge because when we all sat down to watch the "Adam and Eli Show" season premier I gave him the folding chair and as I expected it collapsed. Ross deserved it but I felt bad. Stay tuned because next time I will tell you about what happened when I opened my presents.
Eli
I had my twelfth birthday yesterday and my party was screaming. All of my friends came over and we ate some fantastic cuisine in the backyard. My friend Ross was really late so I ate his filet topped with gold leaf. He was hungry and mad so I gave him some of my gourmet sorbet to make up for it. However later I got my revenge because when we all sat down to watch the "Adam and Eli Show" season premier I gave him the folding chair and as I expected it collapsed. Ross deserved it but I felt bad. Stay tuned because next time I will tell you about what happened when I opened my presents.
Eli
the big 1-2! I celebrated my 12th birthday yesterday.
every single one of my friends celebrated with me, and were all on time. Well.............
except my friend ross. smoke was bursting from his ears when he heard I ate his pizza, but I gave him my ice cream to make up for it.
He ate his ice cream so fast, that before you could say vanilla, his bowl looked good as new. But after that he got an awful headache. I felt bad for his headache but he obviously deserved it!Surely next time I'll tell you how opening the presents went!-adi-
Yesterday was the only good day in the year because it was my 12th birthday. All my friends showed up except Ross ( he is not my friend anymore because he was late). The clock hit 8:00 p.m. and we all bolted down stairs for pizza. I devoured my slice of pizza and then thought for a second. I thought "its only Ross" and couple seconds after I finished thinking his slice was in my belly. At 8:45 p.m. the door bell rang and I ran to the door. I opened the door and screamed " DID YOU BRING MY PRESENT". It was only Ross. I snatched the present out of his hands and let him in. Ross almost had heart attack because I ate his food. I felt sorry for him so I gave the sprinkles that were on my slice of cake. He ate his slice of cake in a flash and then he got the biggest brain freeze ever known to man kind. He said he was dying. I could not care less, he came late to the best occasion of the year. When everyone was leaving I gave out loot-bags. There were not enough so Ross did not get one ( I stole his). Next time I will tell you about the presents I got. I think I know what I got because I asked everyone to buy a different think.
by: max ( the most bestest greatster thingamabober to ever live)
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