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Little Blue Sue

Once upon of time there was a girl name Little Blue Sue. She was very blue and her name was originally Sue. She wanted to go on a journey a journey to her sister’s hut. Her sister’s name was Hana. But this wasn’t any ordinary journey because she had to go through a desert to get to her sister’s hut. She tried to picture an image of what would be in the desert. But she could not picture anything.

“ What if … no, not that!” said Little Blue Sue as she created a scary picture in her mind.

“I guess I could give Hana a call and ask what I would need on this journey.”

“ Ring, ring!”

“Hi this is your sister Little Blue Sue.”

“Is that really you Little Blue Sue? I have not seen you for ages!” Screamed Hana in to the phone.

“Yah I was just calling to ask you a question about the desert, since I am going to your hut.”

“What is it?”

“Well I know this is kind of embarrassing but what do you need in the desert.”

“You should bring what you think you will need. That’s my one piece of advice.”

By now Little Blue Sue had exactly one hour if she wanted to make it for lunch. But she was still deciding what she should bring. Dumb enough she brings nothing but her.

Now Little Blue Sue is on her journey. She can’t wait to arrive! She is getting exhausted and needs to take a brake of walking. So she takes a brake and sits right next to the palm tree. A few minutes later she resumes walking. “Boo!” Says a creepy animal from behind Little Blue Sue.

“Oh my G-D who are you.”

“ I am about to be your worse night mare.” Said the Carcass

The carcass takes her arm and strangles her. Now he begins to take her slowly to her sister’s hut. But little Blue Sue doesn’t know where he is taking her. Now Little Blue Sue is nervous her life is on the line. But she won’t say a word.

Now the Carcass had stopped walking and let go of Little Blue Sue. “We arrived.” said the Carcass “ and your life is about to get more miserable.”

Little Blue Sue sees a hut. She thinks its Hana’s hut. It is! Hana walks out and could tell that the carcass was giving Little Blue Sue a hard time. Now Hana jumps on the Carcass’s back and says

“You have three chances to get out of my hut and give us a little present because of your rude behavior.”

“ Now whose life is about to get more miserable”? Said Little Blue Sue.

Little Blue Sue and Hana now are chatting it up and thinking what his three chances should be.

“I got it.,” said Hana.

“What, what”

“So I will tell you each chance he gets as we go on let put it this way you will love what I’m about to do to him.”

The carcass knows that his three chances are goanna be very scary but he has a lot of fear. The first chance he gets is… He will ether give Little Blue Sue and Hana a present and get out of Hana’s hut or he will get a quarter of his body chopped off.

“We will be extra nice and let you decide what quarter of your body do you want chopped off.” Said Little Blue Sue and Hana.

“ I want no part of my body chopped off.”

“ I guess we can always do it the easy way and just chop your whole body into pieces.”

“Never mind then.”

The carcass finally decided after ten minutes that the quarter of his body that was getting chopped off was goanna be his head and his arms.

“Oh yah one more thing how would you like to be chopped up.”

“ I don’t care just get it over with.”

The end results were Little Blue Sue and Hana cut his arms and head with an axe but he still managed to keep living.

“ Looks like its time for us to give you another chance to get out and give us a present.”

“This time it’s going to be very harsh for two reasons. The first reason is you don’t chooses what parts of your body you want cut off we do. The second reason is your getting half your body chopped up.”

“What part should we chop up this time Hana?”

“I think we should chop off every thing waist and below.”

“ I agree. Also this time we should use a knife so it takes more time to chop up.”

Now all the carcass has is a stomach and hands. The carcass is now thinking should I go or should I stay.

“We are giving you one more chance.”

“What will happen if I stay”?

“You will see.”

“Ouch.” The carcass says.

Little Blue Sue and Hana end up killing the rest of him with their hands. So Little Blue Sue and Hana lived happily ever after and the carcass ended up having the miserable life. Because he ended up getting murdered. The End.

By Oren Balshin

The 12 dancing princes DRAFT 1!!!!!!

The 12 dancing princes
-By: Barbie
THIS MY FRIST DRAFT!!!!!


Once upon a time in faraway place lived a king and his 12 handsome sons. In a nearby land lived another king and his pretty daughters. Every night the princes went somewhere and danced their shoes to pieces with princesses, which troubled the king very much. No one new where the princes went. The 12 dancing princesses in the land nearby, danced with 12 princes, they also danced their shoes to pieces. Well obviously they danced with each other.

Both kings stated that if someone could find out where the princes and princesses went they could choose one for their husband or wife.

One dark day an old woman saw the miller daughter.
“Hello miss,” crackled the old woman.
“Hi, I better be on my way now,” the girl replied politely, for she was not supposed to talk to strangers.
“Where are you going?” asked the woman.
“To my father’s mill.”
“OH! Well, maybe you can go to the castle on your way. Once there you can try to figure out where the princes go,” the old woman said. Something in the old woman’s voice made the miller’s daughter feel uneasy.
“I would rather not,” said the girl in a strong voice.
“Please, not even for an old woman?” the woman pleaded.
“Okay, I will, just for you though.”
“Thank-you, very much!”
“Is there I need to know?” chattered the girl.
“Yes, the princes will give you wine, do not drink it, then this take this cloak and cover your whole body in it and follow them,” the old woman crackled.
“Thank you very much! Bye,” the girl said and then bid farewell.

That night the eldest prince came and gave the millers daughter wine. The girl because she did not believe the old woman drank the wine and fell asleep. While the girl was asleep the princes and the princesses danced together at the golden castle. They drank dainty drinks, and ate dainty food too.

The next day when the king asked the miller’s daughter where the princes go she said “I do not know because I was asleep.

“Off with her head!” the king commanded
“No! May I at least have one more chance?”
“No! You can’t! Take he to gallows guards, seize her.”
“Okay boss!”

They gallows were at the back of the castle. When prisoners were taken they first imprisoned in the foal smelling cells and after one week they were taken to the dark suffocating cement rooms at the back at were looked over by the executioners, lastly they were taken to willow tree that looked like a navy blue sheet from all the body cloths from the many people that had been hung previously.

After the hanging the eldest son says to his father “Dad, come by the bedroom at ten’ O clock, I have something to show you.
“Sure thing son,” the king replies eagerly because he really wanted to no where his sons went every night.

That night the king arrives at the prince’s door at exactly ten, and he walks in. As he walks in he catches a glimpse of a shiny peal white with a hint of pink diamond ring being put into the eldest prince’s pocket.

“Hey dad,” chirps the seventh prince, he is far the most happy.
“Hey mister!” the king replies.
“Let’s go now,” the eldest one said briskly.

Once down the secret stairwell the princes lead their father through a twisting and turning maze of passage ways that are full of cobwebs. Once through the passage what the king finds himself in a clearing with silver, peach, and cherry trees. The eldest prince then leads the king to an opal blue river, there he sees the king of the near by land.
“What is going on?” says the father of the princes
“I have no idea!” says the father of the princesses
“All I know is that I saw a diamond ring being shoved into my eldest son’s pocket.”
“Really! Maybe we’ll have a joint kingdom.”
“Maybe.”

“Dad come over here,” shouts the eldest son.
“What”
“I am about to propose. Emily you are the most beautiful girl in the whole world and I want to be with you forever. Will you commit to spending the rest of your life with me? Will you marry me?”
“Of course I will. I love you now and will always love u forever.”
“OH! Emily!”
The next day there is a wonderful gallant wedding in the clearing. The newly wedded husband and wife were wedded under the silver, cherry, and peach trees. They were in their best clothes a satin white dress that looked like clouds floating in the air for the girl and a king’s dress outfit for the man.
Now twenty years later they live in the golden castle and have 12 children just like their parents.

The end

Chloe 1st draft of fractured fairytale

Goldenlock and the 3 Hairs


Once upon a time there lived 2 little hairs. The 2 little hairs were as happy as could be. One day they had a baby hair. They played with it, kissed it, loved it, and made it food. They always used to brush it with its nice pink brush.
Mean while there lived lock next door named Goldenlock. She wanted to know everything. She would peek out of her window and stare at the baby wondering when it was born or if it was adopted.
About 3 years later…
“The shampoo should be ready in 1 hour,” said Medium hair.
“Park Park!” yelled Baby hair.
Medium hair finished mixing the shampoo and put it in the fridge to set.
So medium, big, and baby hair put on their beanie and there cardigan and opened the store cabinet and left.
“Look at this nice little house,” said Goldenlocks. “I think I will just take a little peek inside.” So Goldenlock opened the door and went in.
Goldenlock was a very “nosey” little thing. She opened the fridge and saw shampoo. She said “maybe I’ll just use a little,” opening up medium hairs shampoo. “This shampoo is too lumpy, and this shampoo is too small,” she said opening up Baby hair’s shampoo. “But this shampoo is just right,” so she goes in the shower and uses big hairs shampoo all up.
Goldenlock sees hats and thinks she would look great if she tried it on. So she tried Medium hairs hat on “This hat is too big,” she said. Goldenlock tries on big hairs hat “this hat is too lumpy.” So she tries on Baby hairs hat and it fits juuust right. But then she falls and it breaks. “Whatever they would never notice” Goldenlock announced.
Goldenlock is walking around the house acting like she lives there and she comes across some beautiful brushes. So she uses them she brushes herself with them.
Little did she know that big, medium and baby hair were coming back from there walk. And as they walk into the kitchen they see no shampoo left for big hair, a broken hat for baby hair, and they see the girl next door brushing herself with their hair brushes??
“This cannot be,” said big hair. But he knew it was.
Goldenlock turned around and saw them. She was so freaked out that right then and there she killed all three of them.
The End!!!

Jacob's Fractured Fairy Tale

Perspective of the Beast’s Father

Earth. Birthplace of the human race. My race was content on our planet, but someone wanted to rule the universe. He had made a machine that can still destroy entire planets. Me and my comrades had his forces stopped for the time being. Or so we thought. The enemy leader had slipped our lines, but we didn’t know this until we heard the distant hum of a machine. The machine that had destroyed many planets. We got there just in time. He was setting up his machine in space and he had not visited the planet. But once again, we were mistaken. A deeper secret has surfaced in the past centuries. Our worlds have met before.

Once upon a time, there was a princess who lived in a beautiful palace, but she was unhappy – she knew she would be queen, but she had to marry a man first. One day, she saw a handsome young man. When she returned to the palace, she told her father all about him. His father was suspicious and said he would have to go to meet him before he approved of him. The next morning, he and a company of his best guards set out to find the man, but there was just one problem; They didn’t know where to find him. They asked many people, but no one knew where to find him. At last, they found an old man who said:

“The man you seek lives on Smoke Mountain; The most dangerous mountain ever!”

All of the guards shivered in fear. Even the king looked worried, but he shook it off. He wanted his daughter to be happy.

Three days later, the princess still had not heard from her father. The queen was about to send out a search party in a few hours.

“He’s probably having a nice time and doesn’t want to leave,” She assured herself. Suddenly, she heard the beating of wings. A raven, black as night smoothly sailed by her room and dropped a scroll on her windowsill. With dread in her heart, she reached over and picked it up. Hands trembling, she picked it up - it said: If you value you and your father’s life, you WILL NOT send out a search party to look for the king. He is in custody and is fine…. For now. As for the guards, they are dead, slain by my pets, the horrible griffin. ONLY you can come and come as soon as possible. If you are not here in 3 days your father will DIE!

That night, after stopping the guards by telling that an army was advancing from the north, ready to attack, she set out by moonlight, taking nothing but a little food. She travelled, day and night to get there. She looked up at the black castle, after nights of traveling, and felt fear run through her.

Back at the palace, a angry mob was demanding to see the princess .All of the men wanted to marry her, but the queen said that the princess was in her room and not to be disturbed. Finally the queen was so fed up, she burst through the door - the princess was not there. On her bed there were two notes. She read the princesses first, then read the other one. The princess was gone.

After hearing the terrible news, every soldier and man who liked the princess set out for the castle. The man who rescued the princess supposedly would become king.

Back at the castle, the Beast had taken the princess hostage, however, he was not in his beast form. He was in the form of a young man. When he had came out to greet her, the princess had fallen into some kind of trance. Though everyone thought he was a cold blooded killer, it really wasn’t his fault – when he turned into his beast form, he just lost control. Once, he was walking by a village, when unexpectedly, he turned into a beast. Before he knew what was happening, he had laid waste to the village, killed the inhabitants and destroyed the buildings. That is why he had built a castle. He had made the walls thick, so when he turned into a beast, he couldn’t break through and kill more people. In many ways, it was his personal prison – his griffins brought him his food. Not 3 nights ago, he had killed 30 soldiers when they had attacked his castle. But now an army was coming to slay him, free the king and destroy his only hope of never becoming a beast again – he had to kiss the princess, but he was afraid that he would lose control and kill her, like so many before. Letting loose a horrible roar, he called all of his wolves, griffins and bears to his command. They would have to be quick if they were to prepare for an attack. Only if it was absolutely necessary would he fight. He had killed so many. On this planet and on his.

Perspective of the Beast

I was originally born on a planet, not in this solar system. Everyone was like me. Like a monster. Life was good, though and our race thrived. But there was a single beast who wanted to rule the world. A civil war broke out and I knew, that it would only be a matter of time before our race would perish. I fought, long and hard. I saw many of my comrades die. While most of our race stayed behind to fight an almost pointless war, a group of beasts and I left and scattered ourselves across the universe. All of our species were extremely skilled scientists, so I built myself a human body to disguise myself, but something went wrong in the process. A radioactive wave was released with enough power to destroy a planet. Luckily, I was in an underground chamber 30 000 feet beneath the earth, so I saved myself from getting killed, and the world from being destroyed. But I suffered the consequences. Now, I am like this and only a kiss can break the horrible truth I call a curse. I do not know for certain, but I have seen the signs, heard the howls at night. Yes , I think the enemy leader is searching for me across the universe. Now I know the truth. The civil war is over, but the wrong side won. I have seen the streaks in the sky that humans call a comet, but I know what they are. Those are shuttles, designed by my race. The humans are very much like our race. Capable of great violence. Now they are coming for me. My griffins, wolves and bears will not be enough to stop them. There are too many of them. I had hoped it would not come to this, but it is almost unavoidable. I will fight.

The queen looked on at the advancing troops with a new desperation – now her husband AND her daughter were missing. It would only be a day before they reached the castle. Almost there, she said to herself.

“Captain,” Said the queen “begin our attack!”

The Beast could hear them coming. With his intensified hearing, he could here the clang of the soldier’s iron armour against the hard ground. With a deafening roar he ordered his small force to attack. They surged forward with roars, snarls and piercing shrieks from the griffins. Within moments, he heard the surprised shouts of the soldiers and a roar of pain from a wolf. With a snarl, he changed himself into a man and ran into one of the castle turrets and surveyed the battle. Things were not going well for his forces.

The remaining soldiers surged forward after destroying all the animals that had attacked them. Now they pressed forward, determined to free the king and the princess. The creature that was holding the king and princess hostage had to be dealt with.

“We must kill the creature that has taken my husband and daughter hostage,” Said the queen “Kill it at all costs!”

Back at the castle, the princess had gotten free and then had freed her father from his cell. She had heard a faint rumbling in her cell, coming from a tower. She and her father ran up and saw the beast entering a large, oval shape. He looked into her eyes one last time and said:

“I can’t stay here. Don’t tell anyone of my presence here ever. You will never see me again. Take this.” He tossed a small, gold chain with words engraved on it. “Goodbye.”

With that he closed the door of the pod and blasted off into space.

“Noooooooo!” screamed the princess. She looked at the little gold chain in her hand. On it, it said the words, They are coming for you.

Suddenly, the princess woke up in her bed. Quietly, she tiptoed over to her parent’s room. Her father was still there. She breathed a sigh of relief. Just a dream, she told herself over and over again. As she climbed back into bed again, her hand touched a small, hard object. It looked like the gold chain from her dream. With trembling hands, she turned it over. On it were the same words that she didn’t understand. They are coming for you? What does that mean? She thought. As she lay there, confused, little did she know that she would never rise to see the next day again….

cindersmelli

Cindersmelli twisted fairy tale draft one by Gabi

Once upon a time not so long ago, not even so far away in Whistler B.C. lived middle-aged women by the name of Cindy. Cindy was a very beautiful girl inside and out, for the most part, unfortunately she had the ugliest feet. Why would this matter? you may ask. She did not only have ugly feet but she had size fifteen extra wide with multiple warts and bunions. Cindy had dreams of her own, she dreamed of moving out of her tiny room in the house so she could get away form her evil brothers who treated her like a slave in her own home. She also dreamed of going off and marring and Olympic luger on team Canada. Her friends always made fun of her by saying,

“Haha you want to marry a loser”

“Wow that’s weird” her friends would say,

“No guys, I want to marry a luger.”

She never let that get to her and make her feel bad. She knew someday she would find this luger in who she has always dreamed of. One day while she was cleaning the pig sty her brothers left for her to clean up she found an invitation to go to a celebration in honor of the Canadian luge team that won a gold medal that day. She decided,

“I must go, I actually have a chance to meat this mister right I have always dreamed of.”

Of course she didn’t have a dress or nice shies to wear and wondered what to do.

“What ever will I do,” she wondered in distress.

When suddenly a fairy godfather appeared with a “decent” looking dress and a beautiful pair of size five extra narrow glass slippers. The dress fit like a glove but the slippers on the other hand wouldn’t even fit on her pinky toe, so she compromised with a horribly hideous pair of green polyester pair of hiking boots, she was not too worried about this because she assumed that her dress would cover the monstrosity. So without a care she ran with her hiking boots to the party and there she had a blast and yes, as you probably guessed she did meet this luger that she had always dreamed of and it looked liked they both really enjoyed there company and danced the night away. When the clock struck 11:59 she had to be back home and so, just like that she disappeared without even a goodbye or a phone number. When the party was finally over the luger said,

“Goodbye everyone, thanks for coming eh,”

He took one look at these ugly shoe he had found at the bottom of his stairs and decided that he wouldn’t even bother finding the owner of these ugly shoes because he just assumed that since these shoes were so gross that the owner would be as ugly and gross, without realizing that the shoe actually belonged to Cindy the beautiful girl that he had danced with earlier that night.

So in the end Cindy and the luger didn’t go off and live a happy life together but Cindy didn’t live a completely horrible and lonely life. She ended up being the guinea pig for a foot fungus laboratory and saving enough money to move out of the house and far away form her evil step brothers and for the luger he met a skeleton athlete and ended up marring her so I guess you can say, and they all lived happily ever after, for the most part.

Seth's Fairy Tale

Once upon a time family of ducks lived on a farm. There was one mother duck and three ugly ducklings and one egg still waiting to hatch. One day, the last egg finally hatched and a huge flash of light sprang out of the egg shells and a beautiful duck walked out of the light. Every second you looked at him, it looked like he was glowing!
The next day, the whole family went to the farmhouse to talk to the other animals. The mother duck was so proud of the beautiful duckling that she paid most attention to him instead of the other ducks. The mother took them to talk with the roosters, but it would only be her talking about how great the beautiful duckling was. After a while of the mother duck always bragging about the beautiful duckling, the three ugly ducklings became jealous and they had to do something about it.
One night after the beautiful duckling and the mother duck had gone to sleep, they started to think of plans to solve their problem. They thought that if they were to sabotage the beautiful duckling’s beauty, then the mother duck would pay the same amount of attention to them and she would not have anything to brag about. So they thought of many ideas to do this, but they decided they would try to hit him with something in his sleep.
The next day, the mother duck decided to take the ducklings for a swim at the pond. When they got there, the three ugly ducklings went over the plan. While they were swimming the beautiful duckling said,
“What are you guys talking about,” he asked.
“None of your business,” the three ugly ducklings replied. The beautiful duckling did not know why the ugly ducklings were acting so weird around him lately. He had not done anything wrong towards them so he knew there was something up, but he wondered what?
The next night the ugly ducklings put their plan to work. After the beautiful duckling had gone to sleep, they all tip-toed towards him with the only thing they could find... a shovel. They came close to him and one of the ugly ducklings took the shovel and wacked the beautiful duckling. They thought that it should definitely do the trick. What they did not know was that the beautiful duckling went to the washroom and they had just hit his stuffed animals.
The next morning the three ugly ducklings were very excited for their day free from their mother showing off the beautiful duckling. Before the beautiful duckling woke up, the ugly ducklings were acting extremely excited. The mother duck knew they were up to something. So she asked them,
“What are you three so excited about?”
“Oh nothing,” they replied while shaking. Then a huge ball of light appeared and the ugly ducklings were very excited. They knew they made him ugly but not ugly enough to make him have light reflecting off of him! Then they saw the beautiful duckling, but when they saw him, he was definitely not what they expected. He was even more beautiful than before! But how, they thought, could this possibly be! He walked towards them and acted like nothing had happened!
So the ugly ducklings decided there was not a way to deal with their problem and they would just have to let it go. They could not do anything about it. So they let time pass and they dealt with the jealousy and the boasting of their mother. When they got older, they could not take it any longer. They decided all three of them would move away together and not have to deal with the beautiful duckling and their mother.
The next morning, they were going to make their move. The mother did not mind if they went, all she cared about was having the beautiful duckling to brag about. So when the ugly ducklings started walking away, they felt weird and a bit sick and wondered what was happening to them. They went back to their mother and the beautiful duckling. Oddly the beautiful duckling was feeling weird and sick too. They looked in the mirror and they all looked completely different! The ugly ducklings were beautiful and the beautiful duckling was ugly! The ugly ducklings finally got what they wanted, no more bragging from their mother. The mother now treated them greatly, but they did not like it for one reason. She started to treat the beautiful duckling like she had treated the ugly ducklings. So the ugly ducklings decided they were still going to move away, and invite the beautiful duckling to come so he did not have to be treated like the ugly ducklings were treated.
The next day at the ducklings’ new pond they were all very happy and they taught their mother a lesson about treating everyone equally no matter how ugly or how beautiful they are. The ducklings lived happily ever after.

Tumble-Ina or (Big tiny) and the Ginger, breadgirl

Once upon a time in the year 2009 in a land called Canada there didn’t live a little girl... Yet, altho there did live a small, small, oh so very small Gingerbread girl, she was so much smaller then all the other gingerbread girls, and so very different to in her mind and looks, well lets just say she was a-a ginger, breadgirl. She had beautiful red hair, but, well she was in the shape of bread so she looked, well lets just say, very, very plump, and she was tiny so very tiny she was and all she wanted was a friend.

So what else to do but ask for one, but the ginger breadgirl was told about the valley of stink were the witch lived and how horrible a place it was and how much it stunk, she really didn’t want to go but she wanted a friend so badly that the next day she even, Ran ran ran as could to find the witch, but the witch new she was coming and why she was coming you see, so the witch put the durian seeds and and a magical pot outside, and put a note on the door saying it was for the Ginger breadgirl and the instructions for planting them.

When the Ginger breadgirl arrived she realized she should of just called the witch and asked her to ship it to her.

A week later the Ginger breadgirl smelled a very stinky stink and on top of the durian she saw a fat stinky, but yet tiny little girl. Over weeks they became best friend they started going for walks but Tumble-Ina kept on, well tumbling. One day they decided to go for a picnic by the river. At the River Tumble-Ina tripped and started rolling down the hill, next thing she knew she was frozen solid bobbing down the river.

She thawed out a year later in Whistler B.C., It was February 2010, the time of the winter Olympics, so she decided that she wouldn’t just sit down and freeze to death she go to some events and go to a five star hotel called the four seasons. She had the time of her life there if you ask me it was quite heavenly.

Tumble-Ina was going snow tube-ing she was climbing up for her third run, then suddenly she tripped and started rolling down the mountain, she was going so fast she couldn’t stop her self, she slid into a snow man but kept on going down the mountain even though she was covered in snow freezing cold and couldn’t see. She knocked down every one in her path, going down uncontrollably through everything and every one, she landed up in the sliding centre during the skeleton finals, she went down faster then anyone else and won the gold medal with record time.

“Sorry Jon Montgomery maybe next year,” Said Tumble-Ina.

At the victory ceremony she got up on the podium to get her medal, and when she leaned forward to receive it she...tripped.

Snow White the Untold Story

Once upon a time, along time ago, in a far away land, there lived a beautiful young princess. She had dark brown hair, and the most charming pale white skin any one has ever seen. In fact, her skin was so white that every body called her Snow White.

Everyone loved Snow White; they were entranced by her beauty, her snow white skin, her dark brown hair and her blood red lips. Everyone thought that her outer beauty reflected her inner beauty. They were wrong, very wrong.

Snow White had a secret that she had kept hidden for a very long time. She learned to keep her secret well, by staying indoors whenever it was sunny out. She also kept to herself a lot, or so it seemed. You see, Snow White was no ordinary princess. Snow White was a vampire!

Everyone knows that there’s no such thing as a nice vampire, and Snow White was no exception to that rule. She was evil to the bone!

Snow White awoke one miserable, wet morning. “Yes!” she shouted when she saw the rain pouring down from the sky. “I love it when the sun doesn’t shine. Now I can go outside without the sun light killing me.” She got dressed quickly and headed outside to get some food.

Snow White walked to a nearby playground with a squeaky swing set and many trees. She walked up to a group of children and they were immediately mesmerized by her great beauty. “Being beautiful makes everything so easy,” Snow White said to herself. She started talking to a nice, little boy and soon enough they found themselves walking towards her house in the forest. On the way to Snow White’s house, from the corner of her eye she spotted a handsome young man staring at her. She was distracted when the little boy who sneezed three times. “What’s the matter with you, Sneezy?” Snow White asked?

“My name’s not Sneezy,” replied the little boy.

“It is now!” Snow White exclaimed as she pulled him into her house and locked the door behind them. “Sneezy,” she said, “I’d like you to meet Sleepy, Dopey, Doc, Happy, Bashful, Grumpy and Delicious.” Sneezy looked up and saw what looked like seven dwarfs. When he took a better look, Sneezy noticed that the dwarfs were actually children wearing fake beards and old people’s clothes, and that his best friend, Billy, was one of them. Billy had been missing for over a year and everyone had thought he was dead. Now, Sneezy was starting to figure things out.

In the meantime, Snow White had become a bit hungry from her expedition and called one of the dwarf like children over. “Come here Delicious,” she said, and led him out of the house. She returned an hour later, without Delicious and with bright red lips. “You can have Delicious’ bed,” she told Sneezy. “He won’t be coming back.”

The next morning, the seven remaining children were forced to wake up early, put on their fake beards and old people’s clothes and march to work before the sun rose. Snow White followed behind them to make sure they were working. To make it seem like they were happy, she forced them to sing the most ridiculous, overly happy song that no one in their right mind would ever sing on their way to work. It went “Hi ho, hi ho, it’s off to work we go. We work all day, we work all night, hi ho, hi ho, hi ho, hi ho…”

Snow White forced the children to work every day and forced them to pretend that they were happy all the time. Her plan was to make them work until they got big and then serve as her dinner. It was an evil plan.

Snow White thought that no one knew of her evil ways, but she was wrong. One person did know. One person knew everything about Snow White. Even more than she knew, herself. That person was Snow White’s step mother, the queen. Snow White’s mother was a vampire, who died at Snow White’s birth. The queen knew this and had always tried to stop her step daughter from doing evil, but she was never able to control Snow White.

One sunny day when the 7 “dwarfs” were working and snow white was inside planning world domination, there was a knock at the door. It was Snow White’s stepmother disguised as a handsome prince from a far away land who wanted to marry Snow White. When Snow White answered the door it was love at first sight for her.

Before the stepmother came to Snow White’s house she prepared a garlic clove disguised as a blood red apple both in appearance and smell. Being a witch, and knowing so many spells this was very easy for her.

Snow White made the foolish mistake everyone made with her. She trusted someone just because he was handsome.

“I saw you walking to your house last night and you looked hungry, so I picked this apple for you,” lied the stepmother still disguised as a prince.

“That’s nice of you but I don’t really like apples,” said Snow White just trying to carry on the conversation.

“Oh, that’s too bad. This looks like the best one I have ever seen in my life. I guess I’ll just eat it myself. Sorry for bothering you.”

The stepmother was getting worried that her plan would fail; she was turning to go when Snow White said, “Wait, it looks like you tried so hard to get this for me, I’d feel bad not eating it, so how about we split it?”

The Queen was relieved to hear this and immediately cut the apple in half with the sword she was carrying as part of her disguise. Snow white, glad the prince stayed to share the apple with her, instantly took a gigantic bite. As soon as her mouth hit the “apple” she fell into a deep sleep. The only way for her to awaken was for a real prince to give her a kiss from the heart, which would change her into the lovely girl her stepmother always wanted her to become.

When the local prince heard the news about Snow White he got very, very sad. The Queen then told him if he gives Snow White a kiss from the heart, even if she does not wake up, Snow White will know how much he loves her.

“Ever since I first saw Snow White in the park I wanted to marry her, now I will never get the chance to,” cried the real prince.

“Please calm down, there’s nothing we can do now, but pray and show how much we love her, so go now and kiss her,” exclaimed the Queen in a soothing, soft voice.

The Prince listened to the Queen and went to kiss Snow White. He found her on a glass encased bed. He lifted the glass and bent over her, holding back his tears he gave her the most loving kiss from the heart. When his lips touched hers, her eyes

slowly opened and simultaneously her face changed color. Her face was no longer snow white. It was a tan color, and her lips were no longer blood red. They were a pale pink color. The Prince shocked by the transformation before his eyes, fell forward hitting his head on the edge of glass case. Blood squirted all over Snow Whit but Snow White, no longer a Vampire, was repulsed!

The seven kids who were working on a coffin for Snow White saw she was alive and that the Prince was unconscious covered in blood on the floor. They assumed he was dead by the fact he was not breathing and put the coffin to work.

The Queen walked into the room where she helped Snow White clean the blood off herself. The Queen realized her plan worked and was very happy. Snow White had no recollection of what she had been like before. The Queen placed a jasmine wreath on her head because that was the fashion for princesses in those days.

The Queen told Snow White that she was not snow white any more. Her skin was now a lovely, healthy tanned colour. She decided to call her Jasmine.

Since Snow White had no memory of what happened or all the children. The Queen cast a spell on the children and all the people in the town to make them forget about everything Snow White had done.

Jasmine loved the sunshine so much that she decided to move to Agrabah, where the sun shines every day and she could stay with her uncle who was the king.

Jasmine was lost while traveling through the desert and was helped by a young man. The young man introduced himself, “Hi, my name is Aladdin and this is my monkey, Abu.” For Jasmine and Aladdin it was love at first sight. He helped her find her way to her uncle’s palace. And the rest is another story!

SNOW WHITE ON THIN ICE

DRAFT #1



“We are landing in two minutes” the Pilot said.

Wow I’m actually going to be figure skating in the 2010 Olympic Games in Vancouver. That’s the only thing that matters to me not even that I’m in first class!

We landed, I’m actually in Vancouver! OMG! There is a driver waiting for me.
I finally got to Olympic village. It looks more like a five star hotel! Even though I’ve never been to one. My room has a massage chair and everything else like room service, Jacuzzi and a computer!

I had barley any sleep because I was so exited! “KNOCK KNOCK,” I opened the door.
“Good morning my name is Katherine Evil I’m am your new roommate,” Katherine said sweetly.
“OMG your Katherine the gold medalist! Come in,” I said like a fan of Justin Beiber who just met him.

“Thanks?” Katherine said unsurely.

“We got to go to the lounge for a meeting thing.” I said trying to be cool.

We got to lounge and met the other skaters. There were seven new skaters like me. They told us some rules and we had a get to know you skate then we had lunch.

After lunch we went back to are rooms and relaxed. Then most of us went to the club on Main Street to have diner it was called the 4 L’s.

When I came back I had to walk in very quietly because Katherine was sleeping. I got into bed and fell asleep instantly.

Katherine alarm clock went off at five AM. She got out of bed and went for a walk. I couldn’t fall back asleep so I got up and ran along the sea wall in Vancouver it was beautiful. When it was finally 7:30 I went back. I took a long shower and by 9:00 I was ready for practise.

All the girls were there and there was a schedule of who is practising first. I was tenth on the list out of 23. First was Katherine. She was amazing. Then after awhile it was my turn.

Before I started some snowboarders came through the door. One of them was Asher Brock. OMG!!! He is so cute. But then my music started and I started to skate. After I was done everyone except for Katherine clapped.

After I went back to my room Katherine packed all of my stuff and said “you got to go I need my own room!” “What? I was here first you should find yourself a new room like a mature person,” I said meanly. She said she was going to kill me so I left.


I went to one of my friend who was one of the 7 skaters who were new at the Olympics Jana Doc. She is very sweet. Then all of the 7 new skaters came Jana happy, Jana Grumpy, Jana Dopey, Jana Sleepy, Jana Sneezy and Jana Bashful. We all decided to go with the snowboarders to snowboard or ski.

All the girls and I decide to try snowboarding so each of us got match with a snowboarder and he’d teach us. I got match with Asher. We had allot of fun till Kathrine came and ask Asher would teach he instead of me. He was so nice and said no. So we went on we had a snowball fight. Then all of us went to a place called Écouter aimer.I loved it I sat next to Asher and Jana Doc. Then we all went back to the Olympic village. John didn’t have room for all of us so Asher drove me back.

The next day I got a text from Asher to meet him in an ally on Broadway. I took the Canada line and walk 10 blocks. I finally got there it was super dark then I heard a familiar voice it was Katharine. Katherine jumped on me and made me drink this potion. I feel asleep instantly.

I coughed, I was awake. I saw Asher he was doing CPR on me. He saved my life. “Jana, Jana, Jana, Jana, Jana, Jana and Jana, she’s awake,” he said in relief. “Move out of the way Snow Snow are you alright?” one of the Jana’s said.”Yeah I think,” I said horsey.

They took me to a doctor he said I needed 5 days of rest which was great because in 9 days we were skating.

All the Jana’s went to the police station and got Katherine in to jail. Katherine was not happy at all.

8 days had gone tomorrow we were skating so all of us went to Jana doc’s room at 5:45 and watched movies till 8:46 then went to bed by 9:00.

I woke up at 9:00 in the morning. I took and really long shower then had breakfast then practiced one more time.

Finally we had to go to the stadium. I was 23rd the last on the list. I stretched and relaxed. Finally it was my turn I stepped on the ice and heard the crowd cheering my name. My music started playing and I started skating. My graceful moves were amazing and my jumps were crisp.

Finally the ranking came in was in first place!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I won I got gold!!!!!!!!!! All the Jana’s came to me and congratulated me on my win.

The next day was the medal ceremony. I stood on the podium on the top and sang my home town anthem OH CANADA. I felt good warring the gold medal it felt great.

Me and Asher got married two years later and lived happily ever after.

THE END

The Young Giant

The Young Bigfoot and the Chuck Taylor’s

Today in a city not so far away, lived Thumbdunk, a boy who just isn’t strong and just isn’t tall. Whose only dream was to get into the NBA. There is only two problems for him one he is short and two he is weak. His family felt awful for him because he was constantly bullied, just because he was different. His family had tried everything from going to the doctor, feeding him tons and even putting him on a rusty green stretching board that his family had bought for him at an old garage sale a year ago. Everyday he would stretch on it for his arms and legs. The only thing that he hadn’t tried yet was steroids. Thumdunk didn’t like breaking the rules he was very honest except he was desperate to get into the NBA.

This morning the sun looked a bright as a lemon and the sky looked as clear and blue as water. Thumbdunk knew today was the day he would call Bigfoot and go with him for six years. In that time he would be trained, given steroids and watched intensively. These next six years would change Thumbdunks life like never before. Thumbdunks mind was stiring with great pictures of himself in a Sixers uniform right beside Iverson his favorite player of all time and his favorite team of all time too.

“Move faster Grandpa” yelled Thumbdunk in stressed out voice
“I’m going as fast is a can. Go to the washroom its going to be a long drive into town. O and don’t forget your bags bring them downstairs. I can only do so much.” said Grandpa in an aggravated voice
“Fine ill go get my bags. You know Grandpa I’m not a little kid anymore. I know when I have to go to the washroom.” said Thumbdunk
“I’m almost ready to go. You better get a move on it if you don’t want to be late.” said grandpa
Thumbdunk ran up the stairs to his bedroom as fast as his little white feet could carry him. He tried to grab his bag but couldn’t so he stood at the back of it and pushed and pushed but the bag just wouldn’t budge. Then Thumbdunk thought of something, he owns a German Shepard named Kellie. She could push the bag with her brown and gold snout.

“Kellie!” said Thumdunk

No later than a second after he called her. Kellie sprinted with her long dark black legs as fast as she could and ran right over Thumbdunk. He hit her and she immediately stopped and sat. Thumbdunk pointed towards the bag and Kellie pushed it down the stairs.

“Okay grandpa lets go.” said Thumbdunk

“Finally! Get in the car.” said Grandpa in an aggravated voice


**
“Were did Bigfoot say he would meet us?”

“I think he said he would meet us at B.C. place.” said Thumbdunk

“Okay. O I think that’s him over there.” said grandpa

“You mean that big black fluffy thing that looks like it its seven feet tall?” said Thumbdunk in an astonished voice

“Yeah! I think that’s him. Ill drop you around the back.” said grandpa

“Okay! said Thumbdunk

Grandpa unrolled his window to talk to Bigfoot, but the Bigfoot was too tall so he got out of the car.

“So how much is it again” said grandpa in a sigh
“One thousand dollars, but you can pay me after” said Bigfoot in his deep voice
“No! Here is the money, this better work.” said grandpa
“Bye Thumbdunk, have a great time!” said grandpa
Thumbdunk ran and hugged his grandpa so hard he could feel his heart beat it felt like a baseball that didn’t stop bouncing.

Bigfoot grabbed thumbdunk and put him on his back. Bigfoot’s hair almost suffocated Thumbdunk. He felt like he was in sand except hairy sand.

“So this is my home well technically cave. Go take a look inside. Make yourself comfortable.” Said Bigfoot
“Thanks, its very nice. When do we start training.” said Thumbdunk
“How about we give you some steroids right now and then you eat and go to bed. Tomorrow we will do some training to strengthen those scrawny arms and legs.” said Bigfoot
“Okay that sounds good with me.” said Thumbdunk in the happiest voice he could think of
“Come over here an ill give you some growth hormones.” said Bigfoot
“Will it hurt.” Said Thumbdunk
“Get over here you little baby.” said Bigfoot
Thumbdunk took one look at the needle and was out cold. So Bigfoot put him on his bed and injected the needle into him.

The next morning
“Wake up!” said Bigfoot in a loud voice
“What its five thirty in the morning.” said Thumbdunk in a frustrated voice
“Training starts today get up put on your clothes meet me downstairs in five.” said Bigfoot
“Drink that!” said Bigfoot
The contents of the glass were gross, it looked like egg and juice was in there and something that was light brown.
“No!” said Thumbdunk
“Yes, do it now. Or else I will shove it down your throat.” said Bigfoot
“Okay, fine!” said Thumbdunk
He drank the whole glass and almost gagged. It tasted like raw egg with juice that had already expired and something soft and chewy.
“Lets start training.” said Bigfoot
“Okay, what should we do first.” said Thumbdunk
“Lets do crunches it should help your worthless abs.” said Bigfoot
Thumbdunk started to do crunches, with every crunch came a feeling that something was pulling his abs together and squeezing them tight, but he kept going and ended up doing fifty.
“Okay the now lets just play one on for the rest of the day.” said Bigfoot
“Sounds good with me!” said Thumbdunk
For the next six years their routine was the same they would do one exercise a day and then a game for the rest of the day.
**
One night Bigfoot dropped Thumbdunk to his grandpa and grandmas house.
“Thanks for everything.” said Thumbdunk
“It was fun!” said Bigfoot
“Bye Bigfoot.” said Thumbdunk
“Bye!” said Bigfoot
Thumbdunk ran to his room and went to bed. He was really tired.
“Your so tall. Basketball tryouts our right now! Let’s go.” Said Grandpa
“Okay!” said Thumbdunk
The drive felt to short because the only thing that was on his mind was will the coach figure out what he had been up to. They arrived at the gym right on time.
“Hey coach Red” said Thumbdunk
“Your huge, how did you grow so fast” said Coach Red
“I have no clue at all” said Thumbdunk
“Let’s start, everyone on the three throw line. First of all this is my assistant Coach Helen.” Said coah Red
“Lets see who can dunk.” said coach Red
Everyone had dunked and Thumbdunk was the last. He ran to the hoop and jumped. The only problem was that when he came down so did the net.
“Out!” said coach Red
“I’m really sorry.” Said Thumbdunk
“Its okay!” said coach Helen
Coach Helen and Thumbdunk both left. They dated for a year and then got married at The Four Seasons.

They lived happily ever after.


Epilogue
Coach Red
He got fired after being accused of breaking the basketball hoop. He went to jail for trying to kill Thumbdunk.

Coach Helen and Thumbdunk
After they got married they started a camp for kids who want to just play basketball and they have one boy named Daniel.

Grandpa and Grandma
They see Thumbdunk and Helen for dinner every Friday night. Gandpa died at eighty seven because of a heart attack and Grandma died a pleasant death at ninety one.

Bigfoot
Is currently still helping others to fulfill there dreams. He doesn’t age.

Beauty and the Beast

Beaty and the Vampire

Once upon a time lived a princess got married to prince charming.

THE END!

That is not my life story, but I want it to be.

Rinnnnnnnnnnnnnnngggg!

Rinnnnnnnnnnnnnnngggg!

My alarm clock was ringing; it was a school day. I got up quickly, got dressed, grabbed a bite to eat and run out the door.

When I got to school lots of people were standing outside talking to each other. I just budged through, knowing that I’ll be late if I talked to anyone, and anyway no one wanted to talk to me.

I walked towards my locker in the senior hallway, when I saw someone stand in front of my locker, it was Gaston. Gaston is the captain and quarterback of the football team in our school.

“Hello,” I said politely, “can you please move I’m tying to get to my locker.”

“Hello to you too,” said the Gaston smiling. “Bonita…”

“What do you want, Gaston?” I cut sharply.

“Bonita, you know that you are the luckiest girl in the whole world?”

“Why is that, Gaston?”

“Because you are going out on a date with the most handsome, popular and strongest guy in the world!”

“Who may that be, Gaston?”

“Me!”

“I’m awfully busy, and anyway, I’d rather not go on a date with you.”

As I was trying to get to my locker I kept being stared at. Usually more people stared at me, but not today. I got my books out of my locker and started reading. I love reading! I was reading when whenever I could. I walked into the class, still reading, as Gaston started talking to me again. I didn’t listen, and I didn’t care what he had to say. I just walked to my seat reading, not listening.

***

“I’m going on a business trip for today and tomorrow, you children take care, ok?”

“Ok,” we all answered. We all came to give dad a kiss.

“Do you want anything, children?”

“A new toy truck!” screamed Brandon.

“A new Barbie doll!” shrieked Kate.

“A Bike!” said Jake excitingly.

“A credit card!” yelled Chloe.

“A car!” said Simon.

“What about you Bonita? Do you want anything?” asked dad.

“Yes, I want a rose, because they don’t grow near here.” I said.

“A rose?” They all asked.

“I’ll do as you wish.” dad said, and then he left with his puppy, Spot.

In the middle of the night I heard loud barks out side the door. I got dressed and went outside to see what was going on. Spot was barking wildly on the front porch.

“Where is daddy, spot?” I asked knowing something was wrong. Spot barked twice and started walking. I followed him into the darkness of the night.

Spot stopped in front of a big building just an hour away from New York. It was a big black building; it looked like a haunted house. I opened the gates to the front yard, taking Spot into my hands. I walked quickly through the yard and opened the front door. It was dark inside and spooky.

“Hello?” I asked into the darkness. “Is anyone home?” No answer. “Hello?”

“I suggest you leave little girl,” said a mysterious voice.

“Who are you? Where are you? And anyway I’m not a little girl!” I said stiffly. “I’m here for a reason. I’m looking for my dad, and why am I telling you all of this?” I said angrily, walking off.

I walked down stairs to the basement of the building, and then I saw jail cells and looked at them blankly.

“Dad? Dad? Are in here?”

“Bonita? What are you doing here?”

“I came to get you out of here.”

“No, you have to get out of here”

“Why?”

“Because of the…”

“Aaaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrr!” some one roared behind me. I gasped when I saw the Vampire. He was so ugly I couldn’t believe it. He looked angrily at me, and I was frightened.

“How dare you come in here?!” said the Vampire angrily.

“How dare you take my father hostage?” I replied with no respect. “You have to let him go!”

“I’ll let your father go.” said the Vampire with his face down.

“Really? You would really do that?” I said surprised.

“Only, if you stay here instead of your father.”

“Bonita! Please! Don’t!” shouted my father behind me. “Let me stay and you shall go away from here!”

“No, father, I have to stay!”

“Are you staying willingly?” asked the Vampire staring at me.

“Yes, I am.”

“Then you shall go!” said the Vampire to my father. The Vampire took him out of the jail cell, grabbed his hand and rushed out side with him. Then he put him on a horse, which slowly disappeared.

“I’ll show you to your room,” said the Vampire quietly, walking up the stairs to the second floor. He walked down the hallway and I followed, upset that I gave up my life, and that I will never see my family again.

“This is your room,” he said opening a big set of doors. “I hope you enjoy it.” Then he left. “You will join me for breakfast.” He said coming back in.

“What if I don’t want to?” I asked.

“It’s a command!” he spoke loudly.

“Well, too bad! I’m not going!” I yelled. I fell on the bed and started weeping, soaking the bed in my tears. How could I ever live my life like this? It’ in possible to live your life with a Vampire, the same way it’s impossible to live your life as a fairy tale, or what you dream for your self.

“It’s going to be OK, darling.” said the same voice that I heard when I walked into the building. I looked around the room and saw no one.

“Where are you?”

“I’m here, my child.”

“Where is here?”

“Under you.”

I looked down and saw a cat. That’s weird cats can’t talk, or can they?

“Are you the one that talked?”

“Of course I am! Can you see anyone else here?”

“No, but…”

“I know, I know cats can’t talk.”

“So, how come you are talking?”

“Well, it’s along story…”

“I have time.”

So she told me the whole story, and I listened. It kind of sounded like a fairy tale. It sounded romantic and charming. So, after that I decided to give Leo, the Vampire, a chance. I got all dressed up and came to breakfast. He was sitting in one end of the table and there was a chair on the other. I sat down and smiled.

“I’m glad you came,” he said politely “please, dig in.” We ate in silence until we heard someone burst through the front door. Then we heard more people walking and talking. I stood up and went to the front doors to see who they were. I saw my brothers and sisters and class members and Gaston in the building.

When Gaston saw the Vampire, he walked towards him, took out his gun and shot.

Bam!

Bam!

Bam!

He shot Leo right at the heart. Gaston went closer to him and started to beat the dead body up. All of a sudden it got bright and the cat flew up in the air. She turned into a person. A lovely young woman appeared before our eyes. We all cheered because the Vampire was dead. I looked at Gaston beside me. I should have given him a chance, I will now. If I did I would have gotten a fairy tale life, with my Prince Charming. Now, I learned that I did have a fairy tale life, I just had to give it a chance.

THE END!

Ugly Little Crow

It was a lovely spring morning in Sacramento, California at a turkey farm. The flowers were blooming in a color only described as the color of the sunset. The trees were full of leaves with an amazing shade of green. The wind was rushing through the leaves and made that sound the unanticipated whoosh.
Three little turkeys were born, but there was another egg much smaller and uglier than the others that had not hatched yet; it was as small as a thimble and the color of ash with little specks of electric green on the egg.
Four days latter the ugly little egg hatched. And what came out surprised everyone. It was as ugly as a crow in fact it was a little crow.
The mother thought “Oh how did this happen? I am so unlucky and ashamed of her.” Everyone on the farm knew how the mother turkey felt about her little ugly baby crow, even the poor little baby crow knew what its mother felt about it.
Now the barn gossiped about it like no end. First the horse told the pig then the pig told the cow and the cow told the cat and the cat told just about everyone including the baby crow.
Everyone agreed that they hated the baby crow and that they should take it away. They all said “Go away we hate you! Just leave no one wants you! You are weird and ugly stay away from us and our children!”
The poor little crow just had to face the fact that no one wanted her. So she flew away to San Francisco with a gaggle of geese. They were flying non stop and it was hard for little crow to ketch up so she landed without them.
She landed in the ally of Gabe’s Bar and Grill. It was a nasty run down shack with camouflage paint chipping of the side and a tin roof and had holes in it. Behind the shack though was a whole other story. A Rooster and an ally Cat but most importantly food and shelter. The little crow was so happy she just dived in to the food.
Now Cat was spunky and feisty but smart and Rooster was very old and wise yet still had some spunk left in him but he had seen many things. The rooster was an old cockfight and he had seen so many people and places thus he was wise beyond matter.
Cat had mats in his fur and was a shockingly bright shade of orange with jet black stripes down the side. Cat purred as loud as an engine but Rooster put up with it. Rooster had many colors on his body like his fire engine red head and neck, or his orange back, or the grays and whites on his chest, but we can’t forget his light pink legs. He would crow every morning even though it got on every ones nerves.
Cat and Rooster took the ugly little Crow in as if she were family. They fed her and helped her grow they gave her support and watched her become herself. However the ugly little Crow always had doubt in her looks. In a way they became a little happy family the Crow, Rooster, and Cat.
Then one day the rooster said “I think it is time we tell her about her other option for beauty, she should know all the ways to the beauty she craves don’t you think so Cat.”
Cat yelled in a wistful tone, “No! We can’t tell her, she might get hurt or worse never see us again.”
Rooster replied glumly, “Do you want to live with the guilt and have her not be happy and. Know that you could have changed that?”
Cat said solemnly, “I guess you are right when we should tell her?”
Then Little Crow came in and said “Tell me what?”
Cat and Rooster said together in a whisper slyly, “That there is another way you can make yourself beautiful, but you already are to us.”
Little crow said, “I know, I know, I know, it is the inside that counts you tell me that everyday blah blah blah blah blah! What is the real way I can become beautiful?”
Rooster then said calmly, “Go to L.A. fly south and get plastic surgery, I know some people that owe me and go to there motel.”
Little Crow said excitedly, “When can I go, when can I go, when can I go! Wait! Why didn’t you tell me this earlier is there a catch or something?”
Cat said shyly “Because you needed to know that we like you for you inner beauty not outer.”
Rooster said, “I agree with cat but it is your decision. You can go tonight”
Little crow said, “I am going tonight then!”
Once little crow got to the motel she was exhausted, she slept for two days straight. Now the motel was ugly as sin. Those made the crow feel bad because she thought she would fit right in. The next night she got up and went shopping first to Hollywood, then Beverly Hills, and then O.C.
After two more days she checked in at the hospital. She was getting a nose job, wing lift, liposuction, fillers, botox, new feet, and more. The surgeries total was thirty-eight hours long and for a little crow that is very, very long.
Next came the recuperating progress. She was bandaged head to toe and couldn’t do a thing. She had feedings, battings, and any thing that she would do normally someone else had to do for her. As you could imagine the process of sitting down all day and night and not seeing the results was agonizing to the little crow. So she took up hobbies like, reading, music, knitting, language, and watching soap operas.
After one whole month of sitting down she could take the bandages off and see the results. Since they were in a bad motel they didn’t have any mirrors, so she set off to the beach to sea her reflection in the water.
Once she was at the beach there was the problem of people in the way. Now whenever she was out before it was a night time so she didn’t see many people. She said “Oh my, is this all for me?” Then suddenly a little crab the size of a penny said, “No it is Saturday.” The little crow was sad at that but kept going to the shore.
Once at the ocean she looked at the reflection staring back at her and was fabler gasped at what she saw.
“A seagull! Oh My, I look beautiful and so good looking! I look amazingly amazing!” screamed the Seagull. “I have a white head and a gray back and a yellow beak! I look fantastic!” yelled the Seagull cheerfully. "Why look at me, I’m a seagull everyone at the farm would be green with envy." She was strutting down the “Runway” Beach. That’s when she saw the rest of the seagulls. She joined them and they all flew away.
Now she spends her life stealing sandwiches, scones, cookies and cakes form humans on the beach. But she never forgets what the Rooster and Cat said about her inner beauty because she was beautiful to them all along.