Monday, February 22, 2010

Pascale and the Poutine draft 1

The defining sound of the crowd cheering Alexandre Bilodeau’s name was amazing. He had just won the first gold medal for Canada in the winter Olympics 2010! He was sprinting around the crowd high-fiving everyone with in arms distance. The shriek of the children’s in the crowd’s excitement was just making Alex the most blissful person in the world!

Who wouldn’t be happy? He has a wonderful family and is a proud Canadian! His mom, Dad and brother will always be cheering him on.

There was one thing in the entire world he wants that he doesn’t already have, and that is a wife. She has to be mesmerizing, fascinating and something... something about her that no one else has! Someone to stand by him through big wins and big losses.

Mr. and Mrs. Bilodeau want Alex to be happy, but they have one condition regarding his marriage. The lucky girl has to be French-Canadian. Alex wants to respect his parents, but he’s on a quest to find true love, no matter where she’s from!

As the Bilodeaus are getting ready for bed in their secret Vancouver home, Pascale Dubois is Downtown having the time of her life!

Pascale is downtown looking at the Olympic cauldron, it’s so beautiful, a real piece of art. Suddenly with Pascale’s bad luck, it starts to rain. Pounding drops of water falling like baby’s crying. Pascale is from Montreal so she is used to the rain, but not this much rain. So she decides it’s time to find her apartment.

After two hours of looking for her apartment she gives up and decides to see if anybody's house lights are on. Luckily she sees a glimpse of a bright light shining like a star turning off in a big but secretive house surrounded by colossal sized evergreen trees.

Pascale approaches the door slowly, not knowing what to expect. With her small frail hands she bangs on the door with all her might. The enormous door opens slowly. A feminine figure comes out of the shadow.

“Dear, what are you doing on my doorstep soaking at midnight?” asks Mrs. Bilodeau sinisterly.

“My apologies, I’m Pascale Dubois, I’m lost and I can’t find my way home!” Pascalle replies politely, starting to lightly cry.

“Please come in let’s get you some warm clothes and a delicious cup of herbal tea!” replied Mrs. Bilodeau now sounding friendly.

“Thank you so much Mrs....?” Pascale says as she sits down her wet body on the beautiful couch.

“Bilodeau!” says Mrs. Bilodeau.

“Bilodeau? As in The Alexandre Bilodeau’s mom?” asks Pascale in a surprised voice.

“Yes, why don’t you take a hot relaxing bath and then you can meet my husband and son Alex!”

“That would be amazing thank you so much for your generosity.”

After Pascale is finished bathing Alex, Mr. and Mrs. Bilodeau are all waiting for her in the big living room. When Pascalle walks in, Alex’s face expression turns from tired to Oh My Goodness she is mesmerizing. Her long blonde curly hair is stunning! For both of them it feels like they are the only people in the whole entire world. As if they were long lost soul mates finally finding each other.

As the night went on Pascale explained that she was here visiting from Montreal! It was her first night here and she couldn’t find her apartment!
The more Pascale talked, the more Alex was intrigued to listen more. She is fascinating!

It’s very late almost two a.m. and everyone is extremely tired from a long day. Alex, such a gentleman offers for Pascale to sleep in his bed and he’ll sleep on the couch. Pascale gladly excepts!

Mrs. Bilodeau doesn’t believe Pascale is French-Canadian and decides she will put a dish of poutine under seven mattresses for Pascale to sleep on. This test will show if she is a Real French-Canadian.

When all the Bilodueas are sleeping, Pascale is wide awake struggling to find a comfortable position in her bed. She can feel something under her bed that is mushy, but smells really good, smells like Montreal.

In the morning for breakfast they have a French-Canadian delicacy. Poutine, French fries coded in gravy and cheese curd. Pascale has had poutine before but she was smart, and she knew thats what she slept on.

“How was your sleep last night?” asked Mrs. Bilodeau knowing she slept on top of poutine.

“It was very generous of you to let me stay, but I think some sly woman must have snuck poutine under my bed!” Pascale responds trying to guilt Mrs. Bilodeau into confessing.

“Oh, that’s odd! I wonder who would have done that!” responds Mrs. Bilodeau.

Across the table Mrs. Bilodeau could see Alex staring at Pascale with amazement. She was mesmerizing, fascinating and something... something about her that no one else had!

“I believe you are from Montreal, and I know you love each other, so I give you my blessing!” Mrs. Bilodeau says enthusiastically.

“I do too!” Mr. Bilodeau says.

Alex got on one knee and proposed to Pascale. “Pascale Dubois, will you marry me, Alexandre Bilodeau?”

“Yes!” replies Pascale with excitement!

The wedding is fantastic! The beautiful white as snow dress on Pascale is mesmerizing! She is the most beautiful person in the world right now!

This is the best day of Alex and Pascale’s life! They are so happy to find true love! Now Alex can go on next winter Olympics and win Gold again, but now he’ll have a wife to share the glory with!

To remember how wonderful poutine can be, in Alex and Pascale’s new house beside his gold medal is a recipe for poutine! To Alex they are equally important!

Different things bring different people together, who would have guessed poutine would bring a gold medalist together with an ordinary young lady!

4 comments:

Gil said...

awesome work

Josha said...

You did great work! the only thing is that I think sometimes you got your past, present, and future tenses mixed up.

-Josha

Leor said...

really good job!!!
i very much enjoyed reading your story and i liked how you changed it to the olympics and you could still tell that it was originally the princess and the pea.
your lead and conclusion were very effective and left the reader wanting more. it led me right to the exit!!
AMAZING JOB and i cant wait to read your final draft :)

Isobel said...

thank you guys, and I realized the tenses got a bit mixed up and i'll fix them for the second draft!
Thanks,
Is :)